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Reviews for Entanglement

By : ElvenDemagogue
  • From ANON - megs on February 18, 2004
    hey great job. i was just wondering if chapter 8 was the last chapter cuz i am a wee bit confused. hey but i love your work! keep writing!!
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  • From on February 17, 2004
    You can't really stop now!!! Write some more soon. It's a very good story!
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  • From ANON - Duchess on February 06, 2004
    I have to agree with the revireviewers directly above me. I do think the story is a decent one, but it does not belong to LOTR. Your story would be far better suited to a modern day setting, rather than anything that requires a specific type of dialogue to make it sound authentic.
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  • From ANON - Cap\'n Jack on January 25, 2004
    I got to the end of chapter two, but couldn't continue. For me, a Lord of the Rings story has to hold the proper dialogue and proper styles that would have been used back then. Novlomiel just sounds like a modern teenager, as does Legolas. Well, in fact, they all sound pretty modern. The relationship is moving a little too fast even for people who are friendly. And condoms in Middle Earth? I think the general idea in fanfiction is that protection isn't needed - Elves can't bear children unless they mutually agree, whether they go at it ten timeday day or not. It's the agreeing that consents to a child. No such thing as a condom!
    This isn't a flame, I just think you need to change these things in your story if you want it to be successful - a lot of people reading these stories are perfectionists, so its best to make it into a Lord of the Rings story and not some modernised version

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  • From ANON - Xan on January 18, 2004
    Doood.

    Why on earth did you set thiory ory in Tolkienverse? Nothing makes sense! Medieval European politics, modern clothing and dialogue... Condoms! Whahhuh?!
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  • From ANON - Ali on January 16, 2004
    I like it quite a bit. I do see the similarities in our styles...*thinks collaboration*...you should definitely do more on this one.

    ~Ali
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