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From Dawn2009 on August 27, 2011
I love this story no matter how many times I read it. It keeps me enratpured :D . It had everything I want in a story and more. If adultfanfiction.net would let us have favorite lists this story would be my first choice on the list.
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From ANON - MysticHeero on January 15, 2006
I love this story. Its a beautifully written piece and has a continously interesting story line. Well thought out and good plot developments. Only a few suggestions. One is to go over this story again and perhaps fix the spelling mistakes - I believe its more a problem with AFF uploading then you actually doing it your self because of the way its misspelt. Two - gain a few more facts regarding pregnancy. Not much, but so of it is a litle idealistic. Of course with the manner of this story and the male pregnancy its can easily be explained away, but I just thought it sounded a little too "simple" so to say. Not wrong - its all very well illustrated, just the main facts over how Erestor is reacting through mood swings. I understand that some people are like this, but I found it a bit to exagerated. Another point wasin the birth. It was really well thought out but the part about the after birth was a little misplaced. It doesn't immediately expell from the body in the same form of the baby. In women (seeing as Mpreg isn't real darn it!) the expelling of the after birth is stimulated by the child suckling on the mother's breasts. Again bringing into context the fact that is mpreg and such its is still acceptable and fits with the story. It has a beautiful ending and is clearly thought out. It fits with the story and that can be quite hard to place with fanfiction of this kind. A very interesting story that is definately a credit to AFF. Glad you shared this with us. Any questions or anything totally random for that matter, just email me at mysticheero@hotmail.com and I'll be happy to reply!
I really love this story and I hope you have a few more of them! I'm going to check out your Author's page and story list.
Je ne, Toodles and ta and Keep on typing this ggorgeous honey.
From the MysticHeero.
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From ANON - SilverWolf on September 07, 2005
Hey! I don't see it strange at all that a 10 month old baby could talk and almost be walking at 10 months. I asked my mum not long ago when I started walking without aid and she said I was 6 monhts...I skipped crawling entirely, lol.

Nice story by the way. Well, apart from every one being so mean and cruel to Erestor for somethign that he couldn't control in the first place. Poor Erestor *huggles the poor Elf*
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From ANON - Anon on December 11, 2004
Hi

I really have enjoyed reading this but it could do with a beta somewhere I think some of the words have been mangled in uploading.
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From ANON - Liv on November 22, 2004
I really enjoyed this story, though there were parts of it that I found difficult to read. It was very original and had great plot. One thing though, the typos, it doesn't look beta-ed. Maybe you should have it checked again by someone else.
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From ANON - Ertia on November 22, 2004
Yay!
A sweet ending after all the angst and trauma.
I still wish for a little more resolution with Elrond... like maybe some groveling and begging - but I suppose that's quite a bit to ask!

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From ANON - MorierBlackleaf on November 21, 2004
I was begining to think you weren't going to add the last chapter! What a wonderful way to end the story. I've enjoyed your writing very much, so thanks for keeping me entertained!
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From ANON - Amanda on November 18, 2004
Grrr... no update yet.

Sorry I don't have anything too constructive to say this time. I'm just writing to encourage you to update soon and maybe get a few things wrapped up. His "reunion" with Elrond and the rest of the populace of Rivendell is something I greatly anticipate. Almost as much as I anticipate his confrontation with Legolas and his mother.
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From ANON - daughterofthemidnightmoon on October 20, 2004
AHHHH!!! *Squeals and hides behind computer screen* Don't hue! e! Don't hurt me! How long's it been since i last reviewed? Umm... about... two?... three? chapters...? Ai! I'm sorry! I know i've been back with feedback, but at least I'm here now! You can at least forgive me for that, right? Ah well, even if you don't forgive me I 'm still going to give you a nice long review to try and make up for my tardiness. I was actually starting to get a little worried there for awhile that you weren't going to update. And then I tried to check your site and it seems to have disappeared... Hmm... did you get a new one?

Well, anyway, GREAT chapters! The last few ones (that I convienently failed to review) have to be in my opinion your best writing (not that the rest of the story isn't great!) I love the emotions you have going on. From Erestor's guilt of taking Glorfindel away from Imladris, to the counsellor's slowly regained sense of self-esteem, to Erestor's fears of intimacy, to all the rest of the great portrals of different emotions you have in this story. I love them. One of the best things I liked in the last two chapters or so was the twins apologizing to Erestor as they did. Honestly I don't think anything less than such a public confession would have been acceptable. But that then brings up the issue of Elrond... yes, that pain in the arse elf lord is still being a prick and refuses to apologize to Erestor even after all the hell he put that poor elf through. At least he's getting some kind of divine retribution by now being forced to work with Figwit until Erestor decides to come back... But no matter what, he still needs to apologize... I think he should actually come to Lorien himself and gets down on his knees and BEG Erestor to come back, because obviously Imladris from what Elrohir and Elladan report is tettering on the edge of choas. Then just for fun Erestor should say no and say he and Glorfindel were planning to g the the Grey Havens and sail to Valinor. Wouldn't THAT make Elrond kick himself in the rear for ever even contemplating dismissing Erestor from his post. ^_^ Ah, whatever... I'm sure you'll deal with that whole issue later on, after Glorfindel and Erestor fix some needed problems...

It's so sad that even after all that time together Erestor still feels such terror about being intimate about someone, even Glorfindel, his bonded mate... It's such a true portral of the lasting effects of rape on the conscious mind. At least, though it seems the two are slowly on their way to overcoming Erestor's fears... I wonder what Erestor, Celeborn, and Glorfindel's secret conversations consisted of... Perhaps peptalks or advince on bedroom matters... I'm curious! I want to know! What did he and Erestor always talk about, and then what did he say to Glorfindel?!?! Tell me tell me tell me!!! ^_^

Well, whatever the case, the two seem to finally be getting toer! er! Perhaps to take the final step Glorfindel needs to submit to Erestor and let him be the dominant one toallyally get over his fears. At least then Erestor would know once and for all that there is nothing to fear and built that last little bittrustrust he needs to take that final st..
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Ooooh... I can't wait till the next chapter!! I want to see how this whole thing works out! Maybe when Erestor and Glorfindel finally decide to come back to Imladris, Erestor wonceonce again be pregnant. Wouldn't that be kind of a snarky way of coming back to work for Elrond by being in the same condition he was originally going to be banished for... ^_^ I think Calanmir needs a little brother or sister, don't you? He's such a little sweety himself I want to see what a progeny of Erestor and Glorfindel would look like. You know, there are a lot of stories with little kids in them that can kin kind of corney and overly sugary sweet at times, but I LOVE your little Calanmir! He truly does steal hearts as easily as the leaves fall! He's perfectly believable as a little kid, especially that part when he was trying to compromise an age for him to learn archery (great sport by the way, excellanbby.bby...) Anyway! lol Yes, I love your characterization of little kids. Very believable that do not make me want to vomit from excessive sweetness. Good job! Remember, little brother or sister for Calanmir... I think it would kind of be nice for Glorfindel and Erestor to have a child of their own that can represent thier love for each other. ^_^ Awww... it makes me smile just thinking about it!

All in all, great job with the story overall thus far. I can't wait to read more. Please do hurry, hm? I promise to review the next chapter if you hurry! This is one of my fav stories here! Please pleaseaseease update update update now now NOW!!! ^_^ Till then!

-duaghterofthemidnightmoon
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From ANON - Ertia on October 20, 2004
Awwww. YAY! How sweet! How wonderful! YAY!
Although I do wish we could have been little flies on the ....tal.talan screens during a few of the conversations with Celeborn. *sigh, do they have doctor/patient confidentiality rules in Lorien, or were we just being polite?*
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From ANON - ArchNemesis on September 26, 2004
Poor Erestor...He is finally happy and bound to the most handsome Elf in all of Arda, and he can't make love to his mate on their bonding night. I hope that after Erestor talks with Haldir that the silver-haired Elf makes Erestor see some reason. Excellent work! Please continue.

Nemesis ^_~
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From ANON - Ghost-of-a-Rose on September 26, 2004
My heart bleeds for Erestor and for Glorfindel. I also like the approach of Rumil and Elrohir. Your writis sis superb as always.
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From ANON - Anon on September 26, 2004
Please update again soon
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From ANON - trustingfriendship on September 26, 2004
Poor Erestor, I hope he's able to work through his fear; I was happy ee tee them bonded; I like them living in Lothlorien where they have more friends and people who care for them; still mad at Elrond for not appoligizing; look forward to more:-)
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From ANON - Kimi on August 30, 2004
Yay! I'm glad you updated! Can't wait for more!!!
Greatly written!
I'm just dying to see where you take it from here!
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