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Reviews for Darkest Before Dawn

By : Blossomwitch
  • From ANON - daughterofthemidnightmoon on July 05, 2004
    Oh my god! When are you going to update?! This story is so good! Why aren't you continuing?!?!?! Please don't abandon it. I beg you! I really don't know what plot bunnies to give you for this, though I TOTALLY understand your plight. Bascially, I suggest Gimli going to this mysterious town and inquiring into this blonde elf the guy's pimping around. He has a hard time convincing the guy he (a dwarf mind you) wants to sleep with an elf (perhaps for novelty sake?) but finally pays him enough to buy an evening with Legolas. When he's finally ushered in to see Legolas there's a teary reunion (come on, you know you need one of those in there! ^_^) and Gimli decides then and there to free Legolas from the brothel. They manage to escape (perhaps after killing the owner and several of the other clientel there) and... you take it from there. Pretty straight forward, I know, but it's the best I got for right now, though if you give me time i might be able to think of something else. You could always though have a long planned out escape that spanned over several days, but I don't think would be able to stand the thought of leaving Legolas there for any more amount of time and just 'axes swinging!' break him out. It's up to you, but that's my suggestion. Do hurry with more soon. PLEASE!!!!! I'm dying for an update!!!!!!

    -daughterofthemidnightmoon
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  • From ANON - Rei on July 05, 2004
    Gaah!!! Too mclifcliffhangers!!! (pulls hair)

    ^ ^;; Sorry, this is just the second fic I've read in the last twelve hours that ended in a cliffhanger. Anyway...

    (squeak!) Good lord, you need to write more!! Ahh!! (looks around pointlessly) I've only been awake for an hour or so, so my brain's not in the best condition to offer story advice. Give me a bit to shower and eat something and maybe I'll have something for you. ^ ^;;

    I think you're right; this story does seem different from your others. It doesn't seem to flow the same way, but maybe the drastically different genre/subject matter is affecting how you write it. That does happen. But it's still very good. Sometimes a good intriguing plot will compensate for less than stellar writing. You might consider adding a teensy bit more detail and description, but other than that there really aren't any problems. I'll read over it again when I'm in a better state of mind.

    Oh, yeah, I put my e-mail up there just so you could be sure it was me; there are a lotta Reis out there. ^ ^;; You do know you've just done something very dangerous to your sanity, you know? (tweaks nose) You've gone and gotten me hooked on this story. ^ ^ Pray for mercy.
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  • From ANON - Rutaari on June 27, 2004
    That chapter was interesting, sparked my curiosity. What *I* myself would do then, now that you've admitted to where Legolas is but not given any information about *him*, would be to do the next chapter with Legolas. Let Gimli rest for a while and show us what Legolas is going through. Then come back to Gimli and his journey to Herthdale or wherever. Let us see *why* its so important that Legolas is saved, give us reason to believe he is in *real* trouble. Just my opinion. Great job on this so far!
    Rutaari
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  • From ANON - Calenharn Elflover on June 27, 2004
    Well, this is an improbable storyline, but it is an AU... So far I would say that you have done fairly well with it. As to what to do (or NOT to do) in the future...

    It would be nice if you would avoid the weak whimpering Legolas that we have seen in all too many BAD fanfictions. Okay, so he was overpowered and captured and is in duress. Even though it has been a year, it doesn't necessarily mean that he has been broken. This is a prince and a warrior, after all! I'm not saying that he isn't grieving, isn't in despair, isn't suffering, and so forth. Just, not weak and whimpering. (It would be REALLY nice if you could somehow address the issue of the canonical Raped Elves Die Syndrome. Why hasn't Legolas died rather than continue to endure sexual abuse? Can you come up with some reason for him to hang in there and endure the continuing defilement?)

    It would ALSO be nice if you would avoid the usual "hurt/comfort" storyline where the sexually abused victim (in this case, Legolas) gets rescued, and then is sexually "comforted" by his rescuer. This story may indeed eventually head off into Legolas/Gimli slash, but please, not right away. Legolas would have had quite enough of sex for a while! (In fact, the story could plausibly end with the beginning of a Legolas/Gimli love/slrelarelationship that has yet to be consummated.)

    I see that you intend mpreg somewhere along the way. Hmmm. Well, if Legolas is the one to get pregnant, then seriously consider that he is pregnant as a result of the forced prostitution. That would make an interesting angsty addition to the story. Otherwise, you will be forced to PLAUSIBLY explain how it is that a year of sexual slavery did not make him pregnant, yet hooking up with Gimli did.

    I'm looking forward to seeing how this story shapes up.


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  • From MorierBlackleaf on June 27, 2004
    Yeah! You updated. I don't have any suggestions as to what to write about, but I have to implore (read: beg) you to include portions of the story told from Legolas' point of view. Perhaps you intended this already, but I thougt I would plead anyway. Oh, and, will you be involving Aragorn or anyone else in this adventure? I was just thinking of the complications that having them aroundld bld bring. Makes for good drama.
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  • From MorierBlackleaf on June 13, 2004
    This is wonderfully written. I hope you will write more. I don't usually read Gimli/Legolas fics but this one seems different than most, probably because it was well written. More?
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  • From ANON - Christina G. on June 12, 2004
    I bet i know what it would take for the next chapter! This possitive review!

    A well written first chapter. You've set the plot up nicely.

    And i just love L/G! Much, much more than Aragorn/Legolas.
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  • From ANON - Arnettra on June 09, 2004
    INTRIGUING. I would love to see where you're going with this story.
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  • From ANON - dawn on June 07, 2004
    Oh no. you are not getting out of this one. great story. keep it coming!
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  • From ANON - Celesta Hellewise Harman on June 07, 2004
    ACK!!! MORE! NOW!!!!!!! Valar I am so HOOKED on this fic now!!! You must go on! Like now!!! I want more!!!!!
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