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Reviews for Unbecoming an Elf II: Challenge Accepted

By : fitzkotlr
  • From Yakkorat on March 21, 2004
    Okay, I am severely annoyed with the lack of reviews on this piece, so I'm writing oyselyself. LOL. First of all, I think that everything you write is golden. It's pure and unadulterated QUALITY. I actually just printed off a copy of "In the Shadows of Lothlorien" to keep in my file folder. That makes it the second piece of fanfic I have ever loved enough to print out. Ever. (The first was a Star Trek: Voyager piece called "Distorted Image" that I printed out four years ago.)
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    "Aragorn was in love, but he wasn't a fool." -- Right from the start, it's perfect. The mood is set, his attitude clear. Skillfully done. Masterfully, even.
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    "To re on on this side was to dwell in ennui. To cross over it was a step Aragorn was not sure he was ready to take." -- SUCH a wonderful way to express his inner turmoil, to show the reader jhow how afraid he was to take the relationship to another level, or another depth.
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    "That he had chosen to share his body with Aragorn was nothing less than a miracle." -- I absolutely adore this line. So gorgeous. He's just *radiating* reverence toward Legolas...
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    "The Man found small comfort in the knowledge that this seduction was ly oly one-sided." -- The detached wisdom is amazing here. Just a brilliant addition.
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    "Haldir had challenged Aragorn without the Man even knowing it. More importantly, the Elf had won." -- That line hit me like a blow to the gut.
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    "and moisture gathered beneath his tightly clenched eyelids." -- No matter how many times I read this story, that line always makes me take my bottom lip between my teeth.
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    Their dialogue when Legolas tries to admit what he did? Every word is absolute perfection. Thick with tension, raw with emotion. Just stunning.
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    "You are mine, Aragorn thought fiercely. You will never know the touch of anr whr while I yet live." -- This sends chills down my spine every time.
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    "How to catch and hold something as ephemeral as an Elf? Did you cup your hands, as Aragorn had done, and allow for freedom, hope for trust? Or must you clench your fist in denial and hold tight against escape?" -- The phrasing herjustjust beautiful. Wonderful imagery.
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    "his sword drawing a line in the dirt as he faced the approaching Man." -- How very very appropriate.
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    "Surely my skills are inferior to your own. Or so I have been told." -- OUCH! Just a SLAP in the face!
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    "If it is any consolation, I don't think he enjoyed himself as much as he could have. A pity, but I think he was distracted by thoughts of you." --Oh, I just HATE your Haldir. You make him such an intelligent, malicious thing.
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    "Say it," Aragorn ground out. -- Oh, I LOVE that... I can just hear it! So low, so furious, so perfect!
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    "The Elf's face was flush with color, the brown eyes blazing." -- I could be wrong, and probably am, but I had thought Legolas's eyes were blue. Also, from the moment Legolas comes upon them (and this happens every time I read this), I hear Princess Jasmine from Alladin in my head. "I am not a prize to be won." LOL.
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    "Haldir owned you last night," -- That had to hurt, both to say and to hear. The emotion you evoke is so raw, so ragged. It's just amazing.
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    "You do not want to ask. ll nll not make you. Yet." -- *gasp* This is the point where the butterflies invade my stomach.
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    "Control..." Legolas echoed faintly, closing his eyes as Aragorn licked the tip of his ear. "Yes." -- I know EXACTLY where he's coming from. And Aragorn's next dialogue? If my husband ever said something like that to me, I would be a puddle on the ground.
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    "The urge was strong to worship at this ivory pillar." -- The loakinaking is so intense that it's very difficult for me to stop long enough to pick out any particular phrasing, but this one is too strong an image to pass by. This line is just plain art.
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    Yeah... way too intense to try to single out lines. You have a way of writing the act of sex as if it were an art form. It is beautiful, and never base, and so incredibly arousing. You do your job well, Tricia. Truly.
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    At long last, love--not affection--blazed in the Elven depths. "Perhaps I have never surrendered to you because you have never asked," --s mas makes me want to cry every time.
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    This whole story, both parts, is just done so very very well. I cannot even begin to tell you how enjoyable it is to see a sexual proclivity being treated as you do: as something normal and healthy. You are one of the finest LOTR writers I have ever read. I love your work.
    Love,
    Julie-Rae
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