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Reviews for This Was My Choice

By : fordofbruinen
  • From ANON - Kalima on November 30, 2005
    Ai! Ai! Worse than being tormented by balrogs! Why do you leave us in such a state! Please write more! Please? All right, maybe I exaggerated about the balrogs, but you have no idea howmany times I've retunred hoping to read the next chapter. You've brought Erestor to the point of ultimate torment, and so near to some real comfort, why , oh why leave everyone here??
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  • From ANON - Kalima on September 11, 2005
    I came back to reread ch. 6, hoping for an update, but finding none, figure I would at least prepare myself for one.

    Your ever hopeful fan.


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  • From ANON - Kalima on September 04, 2005
    I've been thinking of your story for days. I keep coming back in hopes of finding more. It's really riveting.
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  • From ANON - Sheeijan on September 03, 2005
    Beautiful, poignant, heartbreaking - all that and more! I had to reread this from the beginning, the impact is just so much more that way. I just love the little details here and there. The bit about Aiglos, such a great way to illustrate how much depends upon the silent advisor! I found his history just incredibly sad; he seems to have only known small moments of contentment - not happiness, per se. Such isolation and loneliness, he hasn't had anything else. No wonder he doesn't recognize the admiration that others have for him. I'm still kind of confused as to what his illness was, since it seems to have been more than just fading. I'm wondering if it's some sort of side effect to his unconscious refusal to heal. Anyway, I was ecstatic to see the update - thank you so much!
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  • From ANON - Kalima on September 02, 2005
    Argh! From what you'd said, I thought this was a completed story1 I stayed up until 1;00 am to be left like this!!??? Torture! Cruelty!

    All right, I'm going to do my copyedit thing, as you have said is okay. Chapter 6: "Copper haired brother" should be copper-haired brother." Ditto : a dark-haired girl, golden-haired girlchild, new-caught ships (though I think "newly caught ships" might be better, in which case you don't use the hyphen), a small, black-haried girl, and cathcing the dark-haried Elf.

    Kneeled by teh faller hero needs to "fallen hero."

    Anyway, the story has me entirely entranced, caught, captured, and bound. I hope you're updating soon.
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  • From ANON - Kalima on September 02, 2005
    Well, you said you didn't mind copyediting-type comments, so I have a few in a minute. I almost didn't read your story (incest is one of those things I find "squicky," as the lingo has it), but I was tempted by the Erestor/Glorfindel pairing. I kept wondering what could have had Erestor so despairing for so long. I admit you totally surprised me, but yes, it makes sense. I was afraid you were going to say love of Glorfindel or some such, which seemed to so belittle the situation you had described. A kinslayer! That definitely accounts for his darkness.

    Anyway, a couple of times you say "silver haired elf." You need a hyphen in the compound modifier there: "the silver-haired elf."

    An "of" that needs to be "off." "...throw the blond of the scent."

    "Blond" used as a noun should be "blonde." I haven't looked htis up recently, but it certainly used to be the case. "Blond" would be the adjectival form only.

    For "mother and father in law" you want "mother- and father-in-law."

    "...as well as her" should be "as well as she." You can check this always by finishing the sentence: "as well as she did."

    Celeborn says "Although remind me that you both need lessons in fair play." By the context, I think you mean "Although it reminds me that you ...." It doesn't quite make sense as it is where it is.

    Anyway, I'm loving your story. It hangs together, the angst is real (instead of based on misunderstandings or truths unknown, which I find frustrating and not very satisfying), and your characterizations are good. So I thank you.
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  • From ANON - Nancy on September 01, 2005
    What a wonderfully writen story. I hope there is more to come? Thank you for sharing it with us.
    Nancy
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  • From ANON - Ertia on August 31, 2005
    Wow. You're best chapter yet. Amazing. Glorfindel. Erestor... the interweaving of the tale... perfect.
    and..you made me cry. You get extra points for making me cry. :)
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  • From ANON - orleans on August 31, 2005
    You did it, you´ve updated !!!!!!!!!!
    *huggs* Thanks, it´s great!!!
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  • From DurOltha on June 11, 2005
    Oooo...heritage now known! Nice! I can Not wait for the next chapter...I am enjoying this emencely
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  • From ANON - orleans on June 09, 2005
    Wow, you´ve updated!!!!!Great chapter!! Thank you!
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  • From ANON - Jayn on June 07, 2005
    Wow.... This story makes me wanna cry. But I can't stop reading. PLEASE update soon!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Ertia on June 07, 2005
    YES! Nicely done! Very nicely done indeed! I have to admit, I didn't see it coming. It just swallowed me in, as much as Glorfindel's anger at the truth! Very very well done!
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  • From ANON - Sheeijan on June 06, 2005
    First, I did a serious happy dance when I saw the update. I was so psyched! But there's a major thunderstorm in my area right now (I'm talking monsooning outside), and the power cut off 4 BLOODY TIMES while I'm trying to read! My poor computer was rebooting and I couldn't get back on the Internet fast enough for my impatience. The worst was when I was about 4 lines from the end and the power cut off AGAIN. Grrr, I need a UPS.

    This chapter explained a lot. I'm intrigued with the idea of Erestor being the firstborn, I will be curious to see where you take the details on that. I really enjoyed reading this story, it's very well written. The opening scene with Elrond and his grief over the impending loss of his sons is one that has been written quite a few times, but this is one of the best I've read.

    Thanks for the update!
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  • From ANON - orleans on April 29, 2005
    Please, continue soon!!! I really like the way you picture the characters, so please keep writing!!!
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