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Reviews for The Fire Dance

By : DurOltha
  • From ANON - Anon on September 11, 2005
    I'd like to offer a bit of constructive criticism. This story started off with an interesting idea and the characters are pretty good, but it seems like there isn't really a point to the story anymore. You might also think about getting the chapters beta read before you post them. The story might be good overall, but there are so many punctuation and spelling problems that it's really hard to follow. Dyslexia must make the writing process difficult, but most word processing programs have built in spell checkers that will even help with punctuation. I think you have a lot of promise, if you can pick up the thread of the story again and find a good beta. Best wishes...
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  • From ANON - TopazKat on September 09, 2005
    Oh wow... I'm so glad that Elrohir is learning how to speak a bit again, that really is wonderful. At least now Thranduil knows how much further he has to go before he can have Elrond. And the bit with Elladan and rumil was so sweet, he was so gentle and loving.

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  • From ANON - Ertia on September 09, 2005
    oops. Poor 'Roh. Silly Cirdan for not paying attention to how his body was doing. Bleah. A pox on silly bottoms who don't know when is too much!
    And rather embarrassing, too, I would think, with half the Homely House showing up! EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEK! (So, I know you don't do het, but is Mira going to find love, or at least comfort, here too? )
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  • From ANON - nikkiling on September 09, 2005
    Loved this chapter! I almost felt sorry for Cirdan, all those elves in his room while he was being tended to. But at least he didn't seem to mind!
    As far as the next chapter in Songs, I sort of lost my inspiration. *ducks head abashedly* Damn writers block. I have it outlined, but just can't find the words. But, never fear! I beleive it has returned, and I started writing some last evening! And now that my book finally arrived (On The Couch 2 by Tom Bianchi... OMG! YUM!) hopefully it won't take too much longer!!
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  • From ANON - Githoniel on September 09, 2005
    Oh, I know, I have been such a bad reviewer *ashamed*... Now where to start, mmh...
    It's great to see Erestor and Glorfindel now acting together and I'm happy that Miradel begins to trust some more people...
    Elrond and Thranduil are divine - lol... it seems the two things you need in life are a Peredhel-lover and a shipwright as friend :)
    Of course my heart reaches out for Lindir, poor sweetie...
    And Rumil, ohhh sweet Rumil... I think he would spill his seed if only the wind touched his member, hehe. Does he even have at least one clean leggins left???
    This chapter today was soooo great... poor Cirdan, I think he was a little too eager with his wish for pain...oh those mighty Peredhel-swords *grin* ... I wonder if anyone of this family one day will have his lover without needing a healer afterwards...
    Please, more stuff like that...

    Greetings,
    Githoniel
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  • From ANON - nikkiling on September 08, 2005
    aaaaw! Poor Lindir! And sweet Orophin rocking him to sleep... *sigh* That was just... I don't know.... I love hurt/comfort scenes!!
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  • From ANON - Ertia on September 08, 2005
    Ah.. so much explained so quickly!
    It does seem that Elrond and Thranduil are ahhh...working things out nicely! I'm really enjoying Tre..err... Orophins role in things... poor Lindir. Hiding so much sorrow behind his music. Now, not to be a nag, but how are Elladan and Rumil doing?
    Oh.. Celeborn says if I don't stop bouncing up and down in anticipation of a new chapter he's going to tie me down. What sort of threat is that, I wonder?
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  • From ANON - TopazKat on September 08, 2005
    Personally, I think that Legolas and Gildor should wait until Elrond has screwed Thranduil into a stupor and then talk to him. It was certainly a tactic that worked well on Haldir, he is much calmer now that's he's gotten a taste of Mel and Orophin is no longer in trouble. I hope that Glorfindel can help Erestor's sister, it would be good to see her mind set at peace rather than worrying about her little brother so much.
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  • From ANON - Ertia on September 07, 2005
    OH! Good for Rumil! I'm really starting to like him! Not in that way, you know! Elladan would have my hide, or ..something...but still! And good for Mel, too! Although I think he should have tortured Haldir just a bit longer. I would have given him some jelly bellies.
    Although the proud MarchWarden tied down and forced to use a flower vase for a bedpan!!!!!!!!!!!!! Oh, I hope Mel enjoys his revenge.
    Interesting. You've given us two lovely creatures, Elrohir, who cannot speak, and Mel, who cannot seem to stop. Very intriguing!
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  • From ANON - TopazKat on September 06, 2005
    *giggles* oh dear, poor Rumil... Looks as if the twins got their father's length and prowress... Still, he doesn't seem scared or frightened. And it sounds as if Cirdan is very happy with his lover's size, no surpise there though I guess. And I am glad that Legolas and Gildor are getting some more time alone. Perhaps after he's been played with long enough, Thranduil will calm down... sometimes a good shagging is all you need, as was proven by Melpomaen and Haldir.
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  • From ANON - Ertia on September 05, 2005
    Whee! Two chapters to come home to! Poor Rumil! He has no idea what he's getting himself into with Elladan! Perhaps he'll need to have a talk with Cirdan! And speaking of which, mean mean Elrond teasing Thran! I do hope our golden King has a chance at revenge.
    Yes, Cirdan can be..most helpful. We need to invent a version of his wine that doesn't leave quite such a hangover though... hmmm....
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  • From ANON - TopazKat on September 04, 2005
    *giggles* poor Haldir, he ain't going no where. And I am so glad that Orophin was able to help Miradel, even if only it was only a little bit. She seems a bit calmer now about the relationship her brother is in; but then again, I suppose it would be hard not to be by this point.
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  • From ANON - nikkiling on September 04, 2005
    Hmmmm... all tied up with no place to go... *chuckles* Mel could have some fun with this one, and Hal could be in for a treat!

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  • From ANON - TopazKat on September 03, 2005
    *giggles* sill Thranduil, of course it's a toy. Another fantastic chapter, I love how Elladan is getting more time with Rumil and also giving more time to Legolas and Gildor, it's very nice.
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  • From ANON - nikkiling on September 02, 2005
    Elrond is so silly! Poking that poor elf... And so is Thranduil! I'm really getting a kick out of the whole backwards words thing.
    So now I'm really curious, how big IS Elladan, especially compared to his father? Rumil may be in for a treat! *evil grin*
    Great chapter! And perfect timing! It's been a long day at work, and I really needed a moment of fun, smutty escapism!
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