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Reviews for The Warrior and the Poet(Extended Edition)

By : Ithilin
  • From butabara on June 11, 2010
    *sniff sniff* I'm all teary eyed. That was excellent. One of the best I've read.

    Rock on.


    Gwilwileth
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  • From Recordkeeper on August 15, 2009
    I dont know if that was the end to it or not but i like the rewrite alot. I read it before you did all the rewriting and i like the way you redid it. is there going to be more? I would like to see more if i could.
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  • From AceSpades on September 11, 2008
    wow i loved this! i know it says complete on the front but i wish it kept going! i want to hear about thier children and thier lives and what not. I loved Aragorn in this, i normally hated reading fics with him in it but uve changed me lol. Fantastic, loved it! Keep up the great work.
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  • From seductivemessiah on August 09, 2008
    aside from the fact that legolas falls for her so easily and boromir fights him for her affections, i don't consider your character to be a mary-sue...honest! a true mary-sue would have the perfect little body, wouldn't already be married with children, so no complications, and after she was raped she would be able to hop in bed with legolas with no hesitations. i thought your writing was rather realistic, aside from the earlier point, and i thoroughly enjoyed it.
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  • From ANON - taterbird on May 31, 2008
    To begin, your prose flows well, your grammar is good, and your spelling is accurate. You don't know how much that means to me, you really don't.

    I won't complain about your character being a Mary-Sue. You've already stated that she is one, and since you're aware of it, I won't point it out again. I will say, however, that you have not done justice to her. There is not much in the way of character development. Rather than bending her to the world in which she finds herself, you have bent that world to suit her. That's not how a character that is realistic should be. Nor have you developed the existing characters in a realistic manner. In a realistic scenario (it doesn't matter that it's fantasy, a good character should seem real, whether they pick up groceries, or kill hordes of maiden-eating dragons) the Three Hunters would not slow down and cater to a slow-moving (and she would be slow, she's never had to run for days on end with orcs on her tail) third party who can't defend herself or others. They are on a rescue mission where time is of the essence. They can't pander to anyone who can't keep up. They would have left her in the first sanctuary that they found and kept an eye out for her child. Nobody would have time to whisper sweet nothings in her ear. You only bother to develop Legolas. That's fine, juggling many characters is difficult, and I don't blame you for trying to focus on ones you want to do well- I'd do the same. The problem with what character development you HAVE done is that it doesn't conform to the rules Tolkien set out for the behavior of Elves. It's an existing world, with existing rules. If you use the language, the setting, the characters, you also accept the cultural standards as developed by the original author. It's not fanFICTION, it's FANfiction. There's a difference. Adapt your characters to their situations, and they'll behave in a more realistic way, and be much more fun to read. As it is, they are standard fan-fiction cutouts.

    As for your OC. I'm sure that you don't mean to have what character development you DO have to make Hesper an unsympathetic character. But she is. You claim that she loves her children and her husband. She throws over her husband with astonishing speed for someone who claims to love him, and want to work out their marital problems. Moreover, she's inconsistent in her complaints about him. First he only sleeps with her when he wants to do the nasty. Later, he's indifferent, and she has to do the initiating. Pick one. As for her children- I'm nobody's mother. I don't completely understand that bond. But I do know that my mother would bring down armies to bring me safely home, and would be so glad to see me when I was found that she would't let me out of her sight- or arm's reach. I understand that a mother isn't just a mother, she's a woman, but in this situation- a good mother would be a mother first. I know you want to portray Hesper as a good mother. As it stands, she is not. She's too worried about sleeping with Legolas. She never worries more than superficially about her child, and gives her up for dead with what amounts to an "Oh, well!". I know you didn't mean for that to be how she comes across. But she does. She doesn't even seem to be overjoyed to find the little girl alive. She seems to behave like a sixteen-year-old who can't go to prom because she has homework. If you want to create a flawed character, bring out Hesper's living in a fantasy world more. That's a source of conflict between her, her husband, her children, and her world. You could make a compelling story out of that kind of insanity. (Read "the Yellow Wallpaper" if you haven't already)
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  • From monklikespunk on May 22, 2007
    Aww beautiful story. I wish you would write more. Seems so open ended.
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  • From ANON - jada on December 26, 2006
    well written.
    compelling...

    i'd like to read the rest...
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  • From ANON - Macheil on December 14, 2006
    What a wonderful story!! Please update soon. While reading this story,I feel as though I am there with all the characters. It's fantastic!! Once again, please,please update soon!
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  • From ANON - satiana on October 21, 2006
    I love this story you have to update.
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  • From ANON - clovis on October 21, 2006
    This story has touched me like no other LOTR story I have read. I could see and feel like I was there and I loved it. You have to continue. Please Please Please continue. And when you do update please email me I'd love to know the minute you put it up, LOL.
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  • From ANON - Jade on October 20, 2006
    okay it's been a while since I have read the original but for themost part I can make out most changes and I have enjoyed them. This is once again become my favorite story to read.
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  • From ANON - Jade on October 15, 2006
    YAY! I get to read it all again. Loved it the first time loving it now
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  • From AngelTeixeira on January 24, 2006
    YEAYYYY!!!! You're doing an extended version of this! *jumps up and down in excitement*
    I was really disappointed when I couldn’t find your stories anymore… I wonder why you took them out (did you?).
    Well, anyway, it’s great to see you’re back and with a so much improved story!
    Keep up the good work! You’re in my fav list ;)

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  • From ANON - Spakhti on September 17, 2005
    oooh! oh oh oh oooooh!!! I didnt know you had posted this already- you sneaky wench! Weren't you susposed to tell me fings like that- oh hang on, you havent talked to me for about a bajillion years. NAUGHTY! But at least now youve finished your magnum opus for the fair, so you might have a spare 5 minutes to check in with your old pal every now and then ;) Love the Ithilin outfit by the way- fourth place is just frickin criminal! I bet the first three placed entries were not a patch (geddit- patch? hehehe) on yours. Perhaps theyre just sleeping with the judges? Oh well, at least youve got Leggy to keep you warm on the impending cold winter nights...
    I love this new EE of Warrior, as I'm sure I've told you often enough by now. You can really see the improvement in your writing since I became your beta *big smug grin* hehehehehehehehee
    Anyway, there are a few things I hadnt seen in this chapter, and I liked them a lot- like the scene with Father Grey at the end, musing on what is going to happen to Hesper and why its happening. Good job! If I didnt need a cup of tea so badly I would get straight to reading the next chapter, but I have a sneaky suspicion that it might be about a hundred thousand words long, and its so cold in my room my nippies could cut glass! So I think I shall make myself a hot beverage, snuggle myself up in your lovely fluffy fleece, and settle myself in for the morning. :)
    Luv Jax
    xxxx
    p.s Dont be afraid to give me a poke on IM! I wont bite- hhhaaaard..... ;)
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