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Reviews for Avaquetiel - Taboo

By : kwannom
  • From ANON - Simbelmynë on January 10, 2006
    Uma grata surpresa encontrar este fic., a citação de Olavo Bilac e a letra de fascinação (uma das mais bonitas músicas românticas, que fica perfeita na voz de Elis Regina).

    Os sonhos mais lindos sonhei
    De quimeras mil um castelo ergui
    E no teu olhar
    Tonto de emoção
    Com sofreguidão
    Mil venturas previ
    O teu corpo é luz, sedução
    Poema divino cheio de esplendor
    Teu sorriso prende, inebria, entontece
    És fascinação, amor


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  • From ANON - Ertia on January 02, 2006
    Very good. I like the descriptions. I wish you'd given us a bit more dialogue - show, don't tell. My favorite part so far was the dialogue between Elladan and Elrohir discussing sharing her. You might give us more of the story from their pov, instead of relying on the eyes of your original character to tell it. Look forward to seeing where you're going with this.
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  • From trekqueen on December 31, 2005
    Very nice! I'm glad with how this turned out and I love the poetic feeling you gave in the first part of the chapter and how you described Elladan. The one soul idea between twins is an interesting twist in this but it almost rings true with how many twins are connected to each other and seem to know certain things going on with their partner. Can't wait to read it again in its full form! Thanks for letting me beta for you, this story is great!
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  • From ANON - Inara on December 31, 2005
    Hi, I´m very interested in your story... keep writing! The beginning makes me want to read more soon.. I love the twins..
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  • From ANON - Phairesse on December 31, 2005
    Interesting start. While I don't think that Elladan and Elrohir share a sould and heart...to share a bondmate is fine.
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