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Reviews for Fallen

By : pip
  • From ANON - chaotic_binky on October 15, 2006
    The scene between legolas and maglor at the end was very touching and the writing was excellent. I didnt expect maglor to kill brandir but im glad he did - he was horrid and deserved it. It was hard to feel pity for any of the humans in the cell apart from he really young frightened one. Off to read the next one now - binky x
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  • From ANON - chaotic_binky on October 15, 2006
    how will sauron react to Maglor being raped? although sauron might enjoy watching he wouldnt like the taking of his property would he? i can see Brandir is for the chop soon lol But did brandir do it so that sauron would kill him and end his misery? questions, questions lol binky x
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  • From ANON - chaotic_binky on October 15, 2006
    poor legolas! Sauron says that he could put him to sleep for the birth and then refuses! At least you didnt skip over the birth scene like a lot of stories do and there was some blood as well! Off to read the next one now tx binky x
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  • From ANON - Crowesaga on October 15, 2006
    As this is very unlike most of the stories you get to read about Legolas I'm curious how it will end...
    It isn't that easy to give feedback on every part and I usually wait until I'll read the whole story, since I usually start reding first when they finished.
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  • From ANON - Daphne on October 12, 2006
    Well, the squee factor wasn't as bad as I thought it was going to be. I'm a court reporter, so I've actually seen pictures of horrendous stuff -- murders, rapes, suicides, fatal car accidents -- that it didn't phase me too bad. I just hate it when things involve children. Now I'm just worried about the babies, what Sauron has planned for them; if Legolas is rescued, what would happen to them, especially the baby that has Uruk-Hai blood -- a half-breed. So many questions, so little time! (bg) Still loving it, and I really am appreciating all of your hard work.

    Later,
    Daphne
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  • From ANON - Yanic on October 12, 2006
    Thank you for explaining all that for me, not many authors would. As for the birth scene, is it weird that all I could think about was Katie Holmes and her odd birth? LOL, a little creeped out by the idea of a half-uruk hai baby not gonna lie, but seems cute enough... guess we'll see the truth behind the nature v. nurture debate
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  • From ANON - elflover on October 12, 2006
    Wow! I am riveted by this story - I cannot wait to find out what happens to Legolas and his children. Update soon!
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  • From ANON - Yanic on October 11, 2006
    Holy crap! I go away for a few days and this story has doubled in size! I feel so bad for Maglor, what was it that he and his brother did? I'm not familiar with his story. And is Legolas about to give birth? I almost want his suffering to be over. That orc rape was just awful. But what will Sauron do with him once he's not pregnant, kill him? And why isn't Maglor pregnant, is it so terrible? As you can see I'm full of questions waiting for the next chapter to explain them!
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  • From ANON - Midnight on October 11, 2006
    Ah, I thought to drop you a review. Being an author myself, I know how much fun it is reading them and how much they motivate to continue writing a story.

    The story is great so far. For one he has quite a unique and interesting relationship triangle between Sauron, Maglor and Legolas. That initself, I mean this unsualness, makes the story worth reading, because it keeps the story unpredictable. Most themes already have been written about somewhere at some time and after reading fanfiction for so long, I barely read something 'really new'.

    I also like your style of writing. Especially young authors seem to solely write about the character's actions, for clarifiction, I mean they write only about what people do. And thus they tend to forget that in their position as omniscient narrator they can also 'see/read' their characters emotions and therefore describe them to their story-readers. Thus many stories, in my personal opinion, lack depth.

    Whereas you mostly, or at least in many scenes in this story, write from the viewpoint of the character, meaning what they think and what motivates their actions. Thus you enable the reader to see a scene through the eyes of the character rather than viewing it from a place without. The best example for this is Legolas' torture scene.

    Instead or 'boringly' describing what is done to him, you describe what he feels what and when it is done to him. The reades does not actually 'see' what happens but he knows it nonetheless. And that is *writing skill*.

    But with all the praise I still have a suggestion, if you would care to read it. I think I noticed at some points in your story that the sentence structure became somewhat monotone. You often started the sentence with the subject of the sentences. He, She, they, the, etc. I would try to variate more.
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  • From ANON - Daphne on October 11, 2006
    You end it there? I love the psychology of these last few chapters, the way Sauron plays Legolas and Maglor off of one another. Very interesting, especially this last chapter when Legolas was brought back. I have horrible visions of the next chapter, the babies being taken forcibly from Legolas' body. Just guessing here, of course.

    Later,
    Daphne
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  • From ANON - nikkiling on October 10, 2006
    You know, I had actually hoped that Legolas would make it out this time... or even that the uruk-hai might have assisted him (why, I have no idea) No such luck, I suppose.
    When I started reading this, I thought it sounded familiar. I read it on ilss, and I'm really glad to see it continued here. I always found this story-line intriguing. You write beautifully, and I can't wait to see where this ends up.
    (And I'm secretly hoping that Maglor will someday be free of Sauron...even if it's through death. Just the thought of enduring an eternity of Sauron's tortures and mindgames... *shudders*)
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  • From ANON - Daphne on October 10, 2006
    You know you're setting a bad precedent for yourself with so many chapters. I will be expecting daily updates at this point! (bg) I love the way the last few chapters have gone back and forth with both Legolas' and Maglor's persepctive on things. I never read your story about Maglor and Sauron, but now I do believe I'm inclined to go back and read that, also. I love the way you have woven the story.
    Hope you're well.
    Later, Daphne
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  • From ANON - Daphne on October 08, 2006
    Oh, girl, what you have wrought, I can't seem to stop reading. You've sucked me in, and I'm enjoying every minute of it.
    Good luck with the cigi's, by the way. Have lots of gum handy.
    Later!
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  • From ANON - Alli G on October 07, 2006
    ouch
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  • From ANON - Yanic on October 07, 2006
    wait there are two? One is Sauron's, so then who is the father/mother (I'm not sure what would apply) of the other one?
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