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From Rozzan on November 05, 2009
Wonderful to have another chapter. They really are on a tour of Europe! Glad they are in York, yes beautiful city, and hope Greyham can shed light on the story and help them, fascinating stuff. Was totally blown away with Legolas's concern for Alysse and her safety, the whole thing of her mortality and his immortality was heartwrenching and especially him using the candle and its flame as an illustration of her life and his darkness when it burns out was just perfect and poetic and emotional. Excellent. Keep writing!
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From laterose on July 26, 2009
I love this story. I am addicted to mythology, fairy tales, and ancient legends, not to mention The Lord of the Rings, so to find all my favorites wrapped up into one story is amazing. Also, your writing style is so professional. I've only come across a handful of fanfic authors that are talented and original, and you are definitely one of them. Though I am a little frustrated at how drawn out the reunion is. Does Legolas have to be so damn stubborn and refuse to visit Alice in her dreams?! I can't wait for the next chapter!!
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From NikaTheCat on July 26, 2009
Aaargh! Reading sprint has just ground to a devastating halt! It's excruciating. I want them to meet Gan - oops - Greyham So Badly now! And the heart breaks at their pain. You write so convincingly. Bookmarkness!!! Looking forward to your next chapter!
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From Rozzan on July 15, 2009
Great to read another chapter. Nicely written between Legolas and Alysse when he declares his inability to keep away from her and that he loves her and that she finally realises and admits her love of him too. I think that is the most beautiful, hopeful, astonishing, magical moment ever in anyones lifetime, when they realise and tell each other that they love one another. It is one we all crave, especially us romantic souls, (but now at my age and with hindsight and much experience and cynicism, I in real life now view it also as a moment of madness, pure shared insanity) Here in your story though I can forget about that and it made me remember and cry and sigh with longing, really good. I am glad you wrote about this moment and the build up to it and the emotions beforehand between the two of them were wonderful, and the promise of what could be now,hope you enjoyed writing it.
I am getting desperate now for the two parts of her life to come together. Though I know busy you are in real life, so I will attempt to wait patiently for that full moon.
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From Recordkeeper on July 05, 2009
please update. im getting really tired of waiting for this story to finish.
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From Silverfrost on April 07, 2009
Thanks for the new chapter. I have enjoyed the chapters set in Rome and the meeting with the professor. Thank you for doing so much research on myths and fairy tales. Loved the references to Gandalf of course. Enjoy very much Alice's interactions with Johan and Andrea in a modern setting and love of course the switch in the style of your writing and use of langauge when you write about Alice's vision. Adored seeing Legolas angry because of his fear and concern for her, with his mithril hair and silver eyes, sighed at the perfect romance of this Elven Prince rescuing her. Love the relationship between Alysse and Legolas and how they speak to each other and her resistance to him and affront at him calling her a child, although in many respects it is an endearment and also how she would appear to him with his long years. Great to see their personalitis bouncing off each other and as an observer being able to see from outside the love and attraction already between them. I really like how although Alice and Alysse are different, one a modern girl and one a mortal from middle earth, you manage both to show the difference that their environment and culture and upbringing has had on them and yet in other ways they are still recognisably the same girl with the same sort of feelings and personality. Very clever and well done indeed.
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From Rozzan on February 22, 2009
"She wanted to fall onto the ground. She wanted to cry her heart out. She wanted to scream like a madwoman. She wanted to close her eyes and stop existing. She wanted to stop the pain the air brought as it traveled through her lungs.

She wanted to die."

Oh NO, after so much travelling and hope and anticipation, how terrible this is. "There was no castle. There was no Legolas."
This has happened to me. I know how bad it is. It's a living death.

Poor Alice running smack into the black wall of reality. There is nothing worse. I feel her "inexplicable pain". Thank goodness Johan went with her and is there with her to help her as much as he is able and he too has shared in the experience in the past, so at least she is not entirely alone and has someone who understands she can share with.

Then her relief that maybe she could recover a little and go back to her old life, admitting that she had been mad and it had all been a crazy mistake, then that snatched from her cruelly, with Logan not even deigning to speak to her himself but using Johan as the go between. Oh Alice how can you bear this? "How could an already ruined life fall apart even more?"

I wonder what you have been through yourself to be able to write such raw emotion so perfectly?

"She had given up everything, her beliefs, her long-term relationship, even her logic to chase after something that could not fit into reason� and now she was left with absolutely nothing. So what would they do now?"

Have you been watching my life? This happened to me!

What a dramatic paragraph, when Johan tries to help and Alice in her anger snaps at him, laughed at the sentence about imaginary people not carrying cell phones, how she refuses to re enter into the fantasy saying she is done with fairy stories and refuses to go back to madness, but there is still the necklace! Which she throws into the flames! Wow. Could hear them speaking, pleading and shouting and feel their emotions. I love how you write these kind of emotional scenes, I don't think they are overdone or drawn out in long angsty rambles, which many people do in their writing, but are real and short and to the point and full of raw emotion. It works.
Then the vision of her past life which ends in her death, a different style of writing which immediately sets the place with its medeival and Middle Earth feel and is full of such action, very well done. Yet Alice is still recognisable as the same girl as Alysse even in this wholly other setting and time, magical. Then the pendant putting out the fire and being cool when Johan holds it, like the One Ring was. So the story is alive again, she MUST pursue it still. Going to Rome? Another cliffhanger. Wonderful.

This story is fantasic, so glad I found it and decided to read. Must have been meant! I saw on your LJ a comment you made about Fairy stories and Princes on gleaming white chargers and unreal expectations for little girls. Will think some and get back to you on that on that one at LJ or e mail. I simply devoured fairy stories as a little girl and it seems now that all my life I have suffered with the boundaries between fantasy and reality so can relate to that.
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From kiaboltz on February 18, 2009
I love this story!!!! Please keep going!
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From Silverfrost on January 05, 2009
Excellent. I have been waiting paitently for an update and was delighted to find it today. Hope you had a good Christmas and New Year at home. Liked Alice's panic on the plane when she didn't dream of him and then her realisation why, that he was carrying out her wishes to leave her alone. Poor Legolas, how bad he must be feeling! Liked her fear that she might have thrown everything away for an imaginary elf and her trepidation when pondering how she will feel when she touches him in real life when in her dreams it is so powerful already! Liked the scariness of the forest and the way the fears of things are different now they are older. Glad Johan is being such a support to her. Really pleased you plan to update again soon as it was of course the ultimate place to leave us in that cliffhanger!
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From Silverfrost on November 12, 2008
Great to have a new chapter. Liked how her family are helping Alice. Her father with the ancient emerald and the unidentifiable metal (I assume is mithril) and Johan going on the journey with her. Thank goodness he believes her eventually and is willing to return to the scene of the past. On the aeroplane it felt like they were those two kids again full of excitement and trepidation at going on this adventure. Really looking forward to more of the adventure and how you work it out. Fascinating stuff.
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From Silverfrost on October 10, 2008
Sorry its took me so long to review your latest chapter, (two of my dogs have just been diagnosed with cancer and I have been spending a lot of time at the vets, operations and follow ups)

Wonderful writing. Alice grieving at the ending of her relationship with Logan was so well done. I remember how that feels, lying on the floor for days almost unable to breathe. How you get into her mind is brilliant. Convinced she needs therapy for mental illness because of what has happened to her, very real, spot on. Then with Legolas again and the anger of both of them, hers because of what she thinks he has done to her to cause all this trauma and his because because of his loneliness and pain for so long and his outrage and jealousy of Logan, both their perspectives and reasons are so understandable and come across so well. You have built up such a wonderful picture of their respective personalites and past and current lives. Loving the angst and problems of their relationship, can so identify with both of them and their feelings. You manage to keep the voice of both their differing personalities seperate, very distinct and real and yet although they are so different, worlds apart, make them still seem so in love and right for each other, well done. My heart goes out to both of them, do hope they can come to some resolution. Very much looking forward to more and seeing where and how this will lead them. Fantastic psychological story. Brilliant! I wish I had written it!
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From Silverfrost on September 09, 2008
Chapter 11 The Joining. Well I'm finally up to date on reviewing your chapters and this one was certainly dramatic. Alice's feelings are so well written and well thought out. From the shock of Logan surprising her and her confused reactions to him. How she can hardly understand herself and how she feels "Funny how she used to think his scent comforting; she had never known real comfort and safety until she found herself in the arms of the elf." How very true this is and yet how can it be when its only a fantasy!?
"Alice looked down, suddenly feeling guilty for her dreams. Had she been cheating on Logan? But how could that count as cheating, if it wasn�t real? And why did she feel so uncomfortably around the man she loved?" Yes this is how it is, and it is cheating in a way and it is so difficult to understand and come to terms with. Poor Alice, I can feel her distress and then having to lie to
Logan, which of course you would do, makes me shudder. You have really got into her head and her emotions.

And then the awful sex scene with Logan. I cringed for her! he in his stupid mortal male way mistaking her whimper for pleasure, men are morons compared to elves.. and her enduring it but feeling nothing, really cringed, that's me every night of my life.

Then her vision of how it was with her and Legloas, so much to unpack here of their relationship, all the terrible emotion of his having to leave, his reasons for doing so so true to his character and who he is, his gift, her saying he wouldn't marry her because she was mortal, how they talk through it, really beautifully written and then their true joining, how perfect he is to say he will stop if she asks it of him (argh! I can't ever imagine wanting to ask Legloas to stop...:) but its wonderful that he will) "�Do you trust me?� he whispered" Oh my! "he was filling her to her core, and it was not only physical, but something that made her soul feel complete." Yes! "What you feel is our bond� We are married now, my sweet Alysse�. until the end of the world comes�� How wonderful, excatly as it should be.
Then OMG she comes and calls his name and of course all hell breaks loose. "What in the world had she done? She had destroyed her relationship, her life, because of those stupid dreams! Is my mind so fucked up that I�m actually having visions? Have I finally gone mad?? Oh God, Logan, what have I done�" ha ha, that cursed imaginary elf!

brilliant chapter bringing things to such a shattering climax. Please post more soon.

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From Silverfrost on September 09, 2008
Chapter 10. Think I've told you this already, nice to see them in the Shire. Love the way they talk to each other and how Alice is so interested in everything he has to explain, as of course she would be being naturally a reporter. "Soon, they would be once more together and not only in their dreams." Oh I do hope he is right. Really looking forward to how you get them together in a world they can both live together in. Fascinating stuff.

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From Silverfrost on September 09, 2008
Chapter 9. Hi, well this chapter sort of answered my query of the last one. Legloas has of course been teling her about middle Earth so she recognises the places and half remembers from what he told her. Have reviewed this chapter before so wont go into detail but I did like the explanatuon of Legloas being drawn to mortals. "And Legolas always marveled at the freshness in the mortals� souls. He had ever found them to be wonderful company" that is so true of him. And liked the story of their first meeting, quite enchanting, and Alice's personality especially in her confusion about him and the anger about her freckles morrors her modern personality well.
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From Silverfrost on September 09, 2008
Chapter 8, An Immortals pain.
Good to see Alice in the modern world, dealing with her excitement at her discoveries, the telephone call from Logan and the e mail from Italy. Gives the reader a picture of her personality as it is now as a modern woman. I like the way this story flits from one reality to the other, very interesting.

I did wonder though at an inconsistency when she went back in the dream world, she does not know anything about elves and their immortality and as Gandalf says later she will not remember anything about her supposed previous life and it is up to Legolas to make her remember, yet without any prompting from Legloas she "remembers" or knows they are in Lothlorien. I guess maybe when she wakes in these locations maybe a bit of memory comes back to her of the place?

Loved this bit "You forgot to mention his touch, his kisses, his masculine scent, his amazing blue eyes, his killer smile, his gorgeous hair, his perfect body, his iron grip, his smooth manners, and-oh!- that velvety voice..." big sigh... Oh Legloas!

Really nice touch that it was Mithrandir who came back from Valinor to help Legloas when he was fading from grief and gave him hope and great that he used the water from the enchanted stream in Mirkwood. Nice touch! Good to have acess to Legolas's thoughts and memories and pain and for Alice to start thinking about how it would be to be immortal and what he has gone and is going through.

Then another mind blowing kiss. As I mentioned before, they both have a huge amount of restraint to be able to deny that amount of lust and desire and for her to go to sleep. Argh!
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