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Reviews for When Worlds Collide

By : ArchNemesis
  • From ANON - Ciera on August 19, 2015
    you should finish the story I like it very much.
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  • From Stormraven on July 05, 2009
    Gah! I love that you're working on your InuYasha story, I really do. But, you could also update this one?! I love how the story was unfolding, has a complex plot, and I adore Severus.
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 22, 2008
    ooh! i like this story!!! update soon please!!!
    ASOTA
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  • From ANON - Aislynn Crowdaughter on July 23, 2006
    Wow, you are fast! Your reply to my review was given nearly right after I made it! Oh, well, here are a few points to add about the second chapter. First let me say, your plot is interesting. I like HP/LOTR crossovers as a rule, and this one has definitely promise. Severus as an Half-Elf and Elrond's son, plus the Ring of Power still around (although one asks himself how the one who hid it escaped corruption, or did he?) - that is a setting that has me interested.

    But if you go on, please get a beta! You change between time tenses in your narration frequntly, there are spelling errors that are just irritating, and some of your epiphets for characters made me cringe. Legolas referred to as a 'petit-blonde'? Ouch! And I feel you are effeminating him here (breaking into tears easily anmd so on), and he seems to be a bit adolescent, too, with his (admittingly refreshing) annoyance about the way Boromir snubbed Aragorn at the council. Ah, and BTW, what happened to Aragorn? Did he become king, if the ring was never destroyed? *Was* there a Ringwar? I hope you will show us more about that in future chapters.

    Then the diversions from canon you take in both universes need some more background, IMHO. It is clear why Dumbledore would ask severus Snape to host some students and teach them in his house instead of Hogwarts, if Severus' manor is indeed Rivendell. Or *is* Hogwarts really what remains of Rivendell,here? Apparently, that means that Severus also is immortal? as an half-elf, canon-wise he would be under the doom of the children of Elrond, to have the life of the Eldar (Immortality) as long as Elrond stays in Middle Earth, but to become mortal once Elrond leaves for Valinor. If Severus is still alive, that means that Elrond is still around. But you said in the first chapter that Severus father has left for the Sea. Then again, if Elrond has left with the Ring to hide it, the explanation that he 'went over the Sea' may be only the official version. Or did you decide on another solution entirely? *Is* Severus immortal here, or was he reborn? Why does he not remember who he is? A spell, or something else? Also, I would like more background why Thranduil is at Elrond's council in this universe, and I hope you will show us what happened to the Fellowship; apparently, there was one here, too, since Harry gets the impression from their start so long ago.

    I can't promise I will follow this story closely, but you have very good and interesting plot material here, and I am really curious where you are going with this.

    Aislynn Crowdaughter

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  • From ANON - Aislynn Crowdaughter on July 23, 2006
    Hi! Too lazy to log in for the moment. This is an interesting start, but I have to say that the Nicknames (Del for Glorfindel, Siri for Sirius) right thrown me out of the story, as did the image of "sweat like buckets of water", which made me cringe with the associations it gave me. Otherwise, you have a very intersting set-up here. Who is this child who will once be lord of Imladris - if he was Elrond's by Erestor, why would that make him heir as long as Elladan and Elrohir are still there? And Sirius and Severus are lovers? Severus is a halfelf? And James is still alive? I'm definitely curious how this will develop!

    Aislynn
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  • From ANON - Thalionwen on September 19, 2004
    Yes, I think you should continue. This is an interesting plot-in-the-making and shows promise of a good tale to come.. I did have a bit of trouble with some of the spelling, but I will certaintly look for your next update!
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  • From ANON - lancelotslady on September 19, 2004
    very nice i cant wait to see what your going to do next keep it up.
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