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Reviews for Beyond Borders

By : Kiav
  • From ANON - The doctors In on January 07, 2006
    I had it in my mind not to review but I just had to take a moment. If you could minimize the chasing of reviews and responding to each and every one it would very apt clear up your writers block. I have found being in the reading sector only, that authors that write numerous stories at one time and who get lost in playing with reviewers and asking everyone else to give ideas on how the story should go, usually become deadlocked in the confusion that they themselves have created. Take time to read reviews for ideas that will make you a better author, other than that dont get lost in them. And I might also point out that to respond to reviewers helpfulness usually works best with a generalized thank you and not a personal one this advoids overlooking someone who has been helpful and shaping your reviews in such a way that you have some control over them. Its take forever to name everyone one by one and is messy to your format and gosh the time that is taken away from your story, well it just cant be good for anyone in the long run. There is also the large chance of invalidating your authors notes when they go on to long and too often, this leads many of your readers to overlook your comments altogether. Stay centered, and say true to your story, its not anyone elses and will be kicking a round for quite some time after you have written it and will speak on your ability to start, commit to and finish something that you started. I will admit that I would probably as a author spend more time pouring through the reviews more closely after I actually finished the story, in case I missed something that is important that would make me a better writer. In hopes that I have been of help. The doctor.
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  • From ANON - abookishgirl on September 29, 2005
    Hi. I have been reading your story and found it to be different than many of the fanfics that i have read. The story seems to be well-thought out for the most part, but I was not prepared for violence and viciousness of Legolas' character. This is not a flame; it is just that all the Tolkien characters are acting OOC, especially Legolas for the reasons mentioned and Aragorn who didn't seem to care or get upset that his people and comrades were brutally murdered right before his eyes. The only one from Gondor that appeared to have feelings for anyone was Arwen (for Aragorn when she saved him and for her father). You may want to consider portraying them showing some care or affection towards their comrades/citizens because I didn't care for or more accurately feel anything towards the people in the story. Also, you may want to double-check for typos because I had some trouble understanding what was being said (not the language of Legolas, etc.) or the actions in some areas; and the flow between scenes (like when it shifted between Legolas/Aragorn/ to someone asking about new recruits. At first, I thought that Legolas had recruited people from Gondor's provinces and was a bit dismayed when I thought that Lord Elrond's friend Erestor and Haldir's brothers were joining the people who killed them until I show that the person speaking was talking to Faramir and Legolas. Sorry if this sounds too negative, but you did ask for constructive criticism. On the positive side, I do like that Legolas does have a softer, almost innocent, side. That makes him a bit more three-dimensional. Finally, I was not able to find *Maniacal Laughter.* Keep writing.
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  • From ANON - Greenp4lm on February 09, 2005
    I'm happy that you wrote this chapter. Although it came later than I expected :) I still think it great. Hope the next will come out sooner *grins*
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