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Reviews for Another Drink.

By : Aranel99
  • From mourn on October 08, 2007
    Hello, Do you have a sequel?
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 26, 2006
    Cute idea, but the story has numerous grammatical and spelling errors. Plus, your sex scene needs work. Here's one example of a bad passage: "...perform a sexual act on eachother, to thirst our needs..."

    eachother should be each other. Thirst our needs? You wouldn't thirst needs. Did you mean "quench our thirst"? People in Middle Earth wouldn't say, "Let's perform a sexual act on each other." And it's boring, too. But Sam might say, "We could pleasure each other, Mr. Frodo, and get a bit to drink, if you get my meaning."

    And Sam shot his DNA into Frodo's mouth? DNA? Is this a science report?

    Maybe a beta could hep you....like I said, the idea is cute for a one-shot.
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