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July 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*starts pummeling Aew's father with fists* What an asshole. If I were Legolas, I would have kicked his ass. Sorry, I get all wrapped up in stories. Gosh, that was a depressing chapter. Now I feel all sad.
You have a good grasp on the way Tolkien's character's spoke. I like how you don't use a modern way of speaking that so many other fanfic writers do.
Keep writing, it's good. I'll continue to read and review.:)
You have a good grasp on the way Tolkien's character's spoke. I like how you don't use a modern way of speaking that so many other fanfic writers do.
Keep writing, it's good. I'll continue to read and review.:)
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July 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm, this story does show promise and is interesting so far. Poor Aew! That was a depressing conclusion to the chapter. I'm guessing that it was orcs that shot him? I could be wrong.
But anyway, keep writing. Though I do have a suggestion. Try and describe more details such as their surroundings, what time of day it is, what they're wearing. True, such intricate details are not needed, but you'd be surprised at how much they can give your story an extra boost.
Anywho, keep writing, and I'll keep reading and reviewing. Best of luck to you!
Minuial
But anyway, keep writing. Though I do have a suggestion. Try and describe more details such as their surroundings, what time of day it is, what they're wearing. True, such intricate details are not needed, but you'd be surprised at how much they can give your story an extra boost.
Anywho, keep writing, and I'll keep reading and reviewing. Best of luck to you!
Minuial