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hey I like this....please continue soon.....

This is getting more interesting, Elladan and Elrohir are banished, Legolas is dead(?), Aragorn has nightmeres. You got to update soon. :)

Evil cliffie!! Surely, you cannot kill Legolas. More story please.

Oh God you are really evil to leave us like this.. You need to update and quick.. I want to know if Legolas is dead or not? I hope he is alive.... :)

Erm....... Your idea sounds really good but your grammar is really poor. I would suggest a beta reader, they are there to help and improve your story. And another little thing is that the Old Forest Road is in Mirkwood which is a long, long,long way away from Rivendell, so the elves most likely to find the injured (dead) elves (and mortal) would be the elves of Mirkwood and not the (lovely) twins. I would love to see where this story is going, but the grammer and lack of detail are putting me off. I really do hope you find a beta before you post the second chapter, and maybe even edit the first chapter. Remember pride is the downfall of many a promising author and the beta is a saviour (and no, I am not a beta or a writer just a huge LOTR fan). Also could you let us know is this is a slash ot het ot just a general fic in the summary? Thank you and good luck. I hope you do not take this as a flame, because I do think you have a story worth telling here, it's just that there are so many well written fics on this site that anything poorly written just sticks out like a sore thumb. And surely the whole point of publishing a fic is so that people read it; and the better written it is the more people will read it.