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August 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
aaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww... mush mush mush mush !!! love it...
hehehe the red haird elf reminds me of my faery Aodh... I could see him getting drunk and abusing poor shy cuties at a ball never suspecting his advances werent appreciated!
hehehe the red haird elf reminds me of my faery Aodh... I could see him getting drunk and abusing poor shy cuties at a ball never suspecting his advances werent appreciated!
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July 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmm... definitely sweet and fluffy. Like a really comfortable feather pillow.
However, the ending feels a bit lame to me. Erestor thinks the turn of events was unexpected, but as a reader I cant really say the same. After all, Glorfindel did flirt with him in the corridor. After that, I dont think a kiss or two is all that chocking.
Still, I really like the way you write. The whole atmosphere of the place came through beautifully. The descriptions of the setting flowed naturally, and without interupting the plot. I especially like the sentence "The silence was wonderful after the loud evening in the Hall and he walked towards one of his favourite trees in the gardens: a big old oak which been standing there the last few centuries."
The comment of the tree, that have been standing there for so long, gives a hint at the way elves look at the world around them. Erestor refers to it as I might do to a beautiful old vase that has been standing in the living room the last couple of weeks.
However, the ending feels a bit lame to me. Erestor thinks the turn of events was unexpected, but as a reader I cant really say the same. After all, Glorfindel did flirt with him in the corridor. After that, I dont think a kiss or two is all that chocking.
Still, I really like the way you write. The whole atmosphere of the place came through beautifully. The descriptions of the setting flowed naturally, and without interupting the plot. I especially like the sentence "The silence was wonderful after the loud evening in the Hall and he walked towards one of his favourite trees in the gardens: a big old oak which been standing there the last few centuries."
The comment of the tree, that have been standing there for so long, gives a hint at the way elves look at the world around them. Erestor refers to it as I might do to a beautiful old vase that has been standing in the living room the last couple of weeks.