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From ANON - giggle on March 30, 2004
Chapter 15
This was a great chapter. Laid out a lot more in motivation and backstory.
It wasn't so great to start out with debrading wounds but at least it helped Legolas get better and we didn't have to suffer smell-o-vision. Thank goodness.
Oh now we get enlightened about Elrond's plans by Malthen. This is a peril that Malthen is worried about. I can see why. I might not be too happy to have your Elrond instedsted in me and my actions.
We get the low down on Malthen and Ninglorien now. OK we know what we call females who sell themselves to the highest bidder. Queen of the Woodland Realm. I can see why she is so hell bent on bettering herself and hating her husband at the same time.
So Malthen doesn't think that Fearfaron has a right to judge him. I think Malthen gave up all his rights when he betrayed Legolas' trust. The slow breaking down of Malthen's defenses and denial was great. You did a good job with that. Slowly bringing Malthen to his knees about his actions, motives and the aftermath. No he can't blame Ninglorien. She just opened the door, he walked in like he owned the place. And Legolas was so bereft of love and care that he poured his love out on this totally unworthy elf only to be given away like a dog that was no longer wanted. Ouch. If Legolas ever finds this out it would kill him. This was a great scene until Gandalf showed up and wanted them to show a little reason. I wanted an elven fist fight here and the wizard just ruins it. Let them duke it out Gandalf.
So Malthen isn't the father but as Fearfaron says if he has to ask then maybe the answer is yes and he just raped his own son. Wallow in it Malthen. OK so he loved her and she had bigger plans than Thranduil but ada said no. I have to interject here. Maybe Malthen in his fugue state that Legolas described was getting back at the whole situation with his actions toward Legolas. He loved the mother, couldn't have her, knows Thranduil hates her and may be Legolas' father. Lots to hate Legolas for so he brutally rapes Legolas and then when he realizes what this will do to his career as an army man passes him on to another. Not much honor there for an army man.
Ninglorien "loves" Elrond and Elrond "loves" the idea of getting Greenwood all to himself. Oh and the treasure horde too. HMMM. Not at all the Elrond we know and love. Interesting take on him though. Gandalf's observance that Elrond is not inspired by kindness. Oh yeah.
Now what does Gandalf want with Fearfaron's foster son? Everyone wants something here. I am glad the Fearfaron wants Legolas to be his foster son. It sounds so right somehow. Two lost and lonely elves finding comfort and love with each other. At least Legolas will get some love without pain.
I don't trust Malthen to keep his hands off Legolas now either. He now knows that Legolas loves him, has loved him and still does. We have another witness who will blow Malthen's little cover. Blow town Malthen. You are so history. He will so that he can see if he can still prove to be worthwhile. OK but it may take awhile. Like a few thousand years.
So Legolas now wakes up and has all his favorite elves around. Only two, that is so sad. I liked the sharing of memories. That is what comfort is supposed to be. Keep those memories green. Meril doesn't want to think about her mate. She has better fish to fry now. The other elves don't want to remember either, let's face it it wasn't exactly a glorious battle for a worthy cause on the elves part. I think it may have just been used as an opportunity to get rid of a certainal pal prince. So threehree of them will remember and honor the dead. Sweet.
In dreams Lindcalon sees the battle and knows that Legolas is not to blame. I think Legolas will still want to perform his Tasks. He is kind of an over achiever that way.
Well another great chapter. I am so glad that this is not rushed. You are taking your time to give each elf, and wizard, lot dep depth. This is my kind of story. giggle

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From ANON - giggle on March 30, 2004
Chapter 14
A turn for the worse.
Infections, abscesses, unconscious, how gruesome. At least his eyes were still open at times. Poor Fearfaron having to haul a nearly dead elf around must have been tough. Then of course no one can help him. At least he won't get in trouble. He has to help Legolas fulfill his Tasks. He had to raft down the river that puts you to sleep. Yikes. No wonder he didn't want Legolas to fall in.
I think Lindcalon is cute. Boring old elves chattering about dull old politics and stuff. Now he and Legolas can talk about interesting stuff like archery and guard duty.
Now Gandalf's beginning to have doubts about Legolas' role in this messy battle. Murder will out and this could easily be murder but not by Legolas' hand. In fact Legolas waobabobably the murder victim to be and the elves who died the weapon.
Ah big news for gossipy elves. A Warrior's Release. Those gits. No one has ever realeased a fallen warrior before yet they insist Legolas has to do it. Of course what they really want is for Legolas to die. I think the woodland elves as a whole should get out of the gene pool. As you may be able to tell I am on Legolas' side 1000% here.
Poor Lindcalon. He would like his father released and in peace. I think that Legolas can do that. He has to lead a very sad life now in the stronghold. Sounds like he could easily become another Legolas. Redundant, unloved and unwanted. He could get offed really easy too. If it weren't for the men at the battle Legolas would be history.
Malthen the despicable is back. Aren't we thrilled. Wonder if Elrond got to him. Eerie music in the background.
I wish I could like Meril a little but I don't. She is a real problem. I think you write very complex characters and do a good job of it. Each one has their own agenda and actions. They don't seem cardboard characters at all. They seem real in most cases. Lousy, rotten, miserable excuses for elves but real.
So Malthen is off to the South since his deep dark secret remorse has been discovered by Fearfaron and guessed by Meril. I'm sure Thranduil has an inkling here about Malthen's breach of trust but since he wants Legolas dead he will just save that up and use it someday to harm Legolas to the max.
I liked Fearfaron's change. He stood up to Malthen, Meril and all the elves. Go Fearfaron. Kick elf bootie.
That was a nice scene with Malthen and Meril. You showed them up for the louses that they are. Hypocrites both. I say that with cheer because I am sure you have plans for them both. I would so like to have Meril up to her eyeballs in this big plan to off Legolas but alas I don't think so. She is just jockeying for the best position she can for herself. If that entails sficificing her son she will.
Satisfyingly despicable elves. Chortling with glee here. giggle

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From ANON - giggle on March 30, 2004
Chapter 13
Malthen bedding both mother and son is kind of a sick thing but with these two, Malthen and Ninglorien, I can see it happening. Ah Elrond thinks Malthen is Legolas' father, that is even squickier, and Ninglorien thinks Elrond is. What a bunch of sluts here.
Erestor sounds like a real sexual predator. Although he does sound like he would be fun. Not like Elrond who is prissy and doesn't sound like much fun at all. He seems to have sex for gain and we know what we call that.
No one and I mean no one is going to be a completely untouched elf in your story. Good. I am gleefully rubbing my hands together here. Just make sure Legolas gets someone or something nice at the end OK?
In the scene with Erestor if Elrond can't take it he shouldn't dish it out. It is very unfair for the top dog to dump on his underlings for the same behaviour but it happens all the time.
I loved your description of the Mellyrn trees and Elrond's talan in his own tree. Elrond is beginning to annoy me here.
Ah you laid out everyone's motives so nicely. I sometimes wonder if anyone is actually thinking or just reacting to external cues. You have let us know that there are nefarious things going on behind the scenes that we haven't even touched yet.
And here we have the first intimation that the fall of Legolas was engineered, after reading ten chapters, and not just a terrible accident. Hollow laughter. I wouldn't put it past any of these nefarious elves to do any underanded trick to gain advantage. Except Legolas who is the noble savage in your story.
So Elrond will try to use Malthen the despicable to recover Legolas. Now we know that Elrond has no altruistic motives here at all. He has a use for our noble elf. I would worry about Legolas' future with Erestor but of course I have already read ahead and I know that trouble is brewing. Things can only get worse. giggle
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From ANON - giggle on March 30, 2004
Chapter 11

I forgot to put the chapter numas aas a heading in the last review. Sigh. I am tired.
Now we get to catch up on Ninglorien, the b*tch harlot. Gotta hate this elf queen. It is just too much fun.
What Malthen has done can never be undone. He was trusted and betrayed that trust to an absolute degree. So Ninglorien 'gave' her son to him as a sexual toy? He could have restrained himself but no he had to rape him. And he deeply regrets his actions and wants to become the true and faithful guardian once again. That statement made me sick. What a terrible elf. He should go and drown in hindsight. Oh dear do I hate this Malthen elf. The more he reveals himself the more I loathe him.
Ninglorien and her self centered existence. I have seldom read of a more self centered mother. Me, Me, Me.
Elrond has used her to spy on her husband and people. What a monster she is. Valinor better watch out cause here she comes. giggle

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From ANON - giggle on March 30, 2004
I didn't like the title to this chapter. It was too scary to think of Legolas fading.
First he isn't recovering like a young elf should. That is not a good sign. He has had to endure a lot of emotional pain in the last few days.
Oh he ran like an abandoned elfling in the forest. Poor Legolas. You really wruearsears out of this situation. He was bewildery hiy his naneth slapping him. So sad. I think everyone has mistreated him at one time or another.
Ah Malthen and a lovley dream o a o a point. Is he still supposed to be celibate or is that over now that the mp (TM) is gone? I mean 72 years is 72 years, elf or not.
Fearfaron and his relationship with his son sounds so ideal. No wonder adar was so broken when he lost his son. So he thinks Legolas' attitude does not reflect well on his up bringing. What up bringing.? Those two nut cases couldn't raise a goldfish much less an elf.
That is just sweet. Ninglorien complaining about Legolas' lack of control, the harlot.
Legolas hearing something entirely different than what is said. He always puts the worst possible spin on everything. All his
physical contact has been negative and he can't instigate positive contact yet he craves gentleness. Sigh.
Wow that was a great scene. Beautly wly written so that the horror of what happened seems almost commonplace yet sends chills up and down my spine. We now officially add Malthen to the r*t b*st*rd list of those wave ave abused and misused Legolas. It is just growing and growing. Has anyone but Fearfaron ever treated him nicely? Poor elf. giggle
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From ANON - louise_oblique on March 25, 2004
really really really good :)

more please?

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From ANON - Yay! on March 25, 2004
I've told you this before, but I absolutely had to say it again - I love you!!! The story is amazing, I'm completely hooked, and I can't wait for more (as always!)
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From ANON - giggle on March 24, 2004
Chapter 10 OOPS I hit the wrong button.
Meril means Rose. Ick. Part of my name is Rose. I really don't want to share even a part of a name with her.

Gandalf's ruminations on the kitchen staff was funny. Elves don't need to sleep anyway so what does it matter if one of them has to get up extra early to fire up the stoves. Silly wizard. Don't tell him I said that. I dropped a bag of beans once. He was wise to let someone else clean it up. I wish I had that option. Blueberry pie. One of my favorites. Well he got his pie but it didn't do him any good. I hate to see it go to waste.

Ah. Happy families. Adultery , greed, bastard children, threats, hurling goblets, more threats and fits of anger. Sounds like some marriages I know today. What a mess. Legolas having to grow up and hear this when his parents let lose on each other must have been horrific. Since they have screaming matches probably everyone in the realm knows by now. How embarassing for the ex prince. No wonder he is kind of a down trodden kind of elf prone to take so much blame on himself. So the king thinks Elrond is Legolas' father. You would think with the elves great abilities they would be able to know. So Thranduil needs a new heir and threatens his mate with divorce and taking a new consort if his Queen leaves. Meril is playing her cards right. With Ninglorien's personality she will cut off her nose to spite her face and cut off her son's head to spite his father. Of course to the king he is already dead. I wouldn't count on it king. I think Legolas is a lot tougher than you count on. After all Oropher was his grandsire and he was no fool and not a weag. g. Perhaps your son takes after him as much as anyone else. And poor Lindcalon. He will be in the big middle of this and get the same treatment from Thranduil when he gets in the way. Ship him off to dangerous duty and hope he gets killed. I think the king wants a nice controlled family and he will kill to get it.

Lindcalon asks "What are these elves?" They are rotten, faithless, manipulating excuses for elves. I am so glad you don't give your evil charaacters any really redeeming qualities. They are so easy to hate. They are so self centered and ego driven they just float along on a sea of denial, lust, greed and me, me, me.

Meril's recollections of Legolas visiting was nice but after that laugh she can't be trusted. She is the new fly in the ointmeor hor him. She's done really good for herself and her son so far and has a chance to really up her ante here. She is smart enough to take it too.

The king is in his couting house counting out his money. You have made him the evil greedy Thranduere.ere. Loving treasures more than anything else usually means that one ends up with only material things, no love, compassion, respect. Just ones greed.

Legolas' wet dreams were kind of scary. That is what dreams are for. We process events and get a handle on them. He kind of over reacts though. Poor Legolas even his mother rejects him in the end. Life just keeps getting worse for him. Well angst is a good thing as long as we get a somewhat happy ending. Of course we can by no means call LOTR a happy ending.

Another nice chapter revealing the mess that is the House of Oropher. giggle
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From ANON - giggle on March 24, 2004
Chapter 10
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From ANON - giggle on March 24, 2004
Chapter 9
I thought Legolas' dream was real for a minute. Nice scene of some tranquil life for this poor elf. He got to sleep in a nice bed, have a nice breakfast and gets to go do some easy work. After killing orcs, spiders and orcs, oh my; picking up wood should be a piece of cake.

The little walk through the town was very revealing. Legolas tathe the the chaos on himself. He is the cause. He fell into the worst sin of the Noldor, kinslaying. The Realm lost it's heir because of his misstep. The warriors and mp (TM) all fell to base blood lust and one citizen almost committed rape. All these things had their nexus with Legolas. At least he senses this from those who pass him by. I wonder how much projection is going oh here and how much is actual fact. I do see a pattern forming here. Maybe Legolas will be used to open up a very big can of worms.

He is going to get all morbid about this death thing isn't he? MP (TM) and the warriors would have brutally raped him causing his death. His third brush with death thoughts in two days. Is all his angst catching up with him.

At least he is having a nice moment with Fearfaron. He learns a little about Analdir. We finally get to learn a little about one of the elves who died. He liked and respected Legolas. That is kind of sweet. Finally someone, Fearfaron, is thinking about things in a rational way. Is this law fair, just? Even a moment of cowae fre from an untried warrior could be understood. Only if this were a deliberate allowing of death would it be kinslaying. No one can respond perfectly, not even an elf.

Good Analdir has been released. Now Legolas will know about the other two. He'll know how it is supposed to be like. I liked the shared moment of Legolas' dream/vision of Analdir. One down and two to go. He can do this. Now go tell the Council. giggle

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From sivan325 on March 24, 2004
You have great story, and I already miss it.

When will you update soon
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I love your story, as I enjoy read it.

Keep up the greatk thk that you are doing with you fic, it is amazing.

Sivan
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From ANON - giggle on March 24, 2004
Something happened to Chapter 7 so this is
Chapter 8
What humiliation. Now Legolas gets not just an eavesdropping audience but a peeping tom audience as well. Yuck, they want him to eat his own vomit. That is really gross but mainpervert (TM) seems to have his own plans and if they are worse than what the warriors want then Legolas is in real trouble.
I was glad the scales are falling from Legolas' eyes more and more through this chapter. He could see how elves could be twisted into orcs. These elves are definitely on their way.

The Commander is a real git. He should know about crowd mentality. Normal decent people in a group will take part in things that they would never dream of doing on their own. I think use use the Commander has not put a stop to this slowly escalating sadistic torture the warriors have gradually allowed themselves to become hardened to it. When the Commander realizes that his warriors are being seduced into this behaviour he finally acts. Not for Legolas' defense or care. Just the morale of his troops.

Ah now it comes out. MP(TM) just wants vengeance. He doesn't care about the Tasks. He has a lover now what does he want with Legolas? Just a sadists dream situation here. Even though that may not have been the main purpose of the law, the law has been erteerted, twisted into a cover for any activity. No one is paying attention to what is really going on.

I wonder how mp (TM) got that dagger also. Did one of the warriors give it to him for his nasty little game? I'm glad that Legolas got it back, to have it in mp (TM) hands would have been almost blasphemous. He got his feather back too. I am so glad. He has so little that he cares for now. Every little bit hurts.

I liked his intense hatred showing in his eyes. No one helped him at all until Fearfaron took his arm. So he thanked Fearfaron while projection loathing to all e whe who not only didn't help but enjoyed his pain. Go Legolas. Smoldering fury for the warriors and peril for them if he ever catches them in the forest. Wouldn't that be kinslaying though? That is what got him in such trouble in the first place. Let the Valake cke care of them. I believe what goes around comes around.

He no longer has any faith in the justice systespeespecially for an outcast who is banished from the law anyway. I think no matter where we live we might recognize that feeling just a little.

Icky why does he want the whip? I hope he hasn't got into self flagellation now. I love the sociopathic mp (TM) never taking any blame, glibly making ees, es, grief caused his madness. Oh yeah. Sure. No remorse fhat hat he did to Legolas, yet he is allowed to travel to the Grey Havens and resume his name against Legolas' wishes. How do they know he will actually go? Considering he's such a liar he could just go set up shopewheewhere else. They were all to eager to get Legolas' banishment out to other realms. There will be no newsflash here to prevent mp (TM) from just moving on . At least the warriors were punished. MP (TM) really got away with very little punishment.

Byed.yed. Yes he was. How will he tell when a warrior is released. MP's (TM) wife may already have been released but of course he would never have shared that little fact. He really needed his little slave to get his jollies. Maybe the Council doesn't care? Nice thought. For the second time Legolas has to realize that maybe they want him dead so that this little problem is over with a minimum of fuss. Chilling thought.

So finally someone doesn't want to punish him but try to help him do his Tasks. After twelve miserable years someone is kind. That is heartbreaking. I think Legolas is coming to see some truths here and maybe realize that all is not exactly as it seems. giggle
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From ANON - giggle on March 24, 2004
Chapter 6
I loved the tree. The Sentinel. I was a tree climber. It gives you such a feeling of onmiscience hidden up there looking at the rest of the world going by.

I was wondering here in this chapter how much of the guards actions are because Shadow is gaining a foothold over the elves and how much is just their natural perversion. I realize this is AU but silvan elves were different. Maybe not quite this different but I hope they are being drawn to the Dark Side here and not just being scum. Sorry for mixing two modern myths together. What takes place among the guards just seems to be such a perversion even for the race of men not to mentioni the FirstBorn. The wager, the deliberate listening and the cat calls while this torment goes on is really inexcusable. Meanwhile the mainpervert (TM) admits he has taken a r for for his pleasure so he must just get a real high out of BDSM. Legolas is a lovely creature after all. Anyway mainpervert (TM) must not have had a very strong bond with his mate for all this to take place.

I liked Fearfaron staring to get fed up with all this torture. He realized that this is not for true chastisement but for entertainment of both the mainpervert (TM) and the warriors who participate in the whole show. And it is a show. Took lonoughough for someone to cry foul here. If not for Fearfaron it sounds like Pool of Sorrows would do this everyday. No seemseems to care that he half kills Legolas and offers to castrate him to boot. Their ought to be laws against this. This type of thing has nothing to do with the Tasks of Release.

On the other hand it was nicely written torture/humiliation with a naked elf and smut. That is always a plus Also the warriors were suitably repulsive. We can get a hate going for all the perverts who were taking part in this and feel really sorry for the poor ex prince. Sigh. giggle
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From ANON - giggle on March 24, 2004
Chapter 5 part 2
I hope I labeled the last chapter correctly.

Orc traps - clever elf indeed. And the orcs are so dim witted they will probably fall for that forever.
Wargs - smarter than orcs. Actually anything sentient is probably smarter than orcI liI liked their population growing in inverse proportion to the amount he killed. It seems that ways sometimes.
Spiders - they almost got him a few times, oh my. No one has mentioned their ability to sense his vibrations and yet spiders do that in real life. Go you. Good he has had greater success with spiders with the use of firing their egg sacs. Killing the next generation works. They even have a special name just for him. He deserves to feel smug about that.

He is going to call on Beorn to carry a message. He feels he has completed a Task and needs to go on to other Tasks. I'm glad he has a feeling of accomplishment. He could have just drifted into depression and let something, orc, warg or spider just take him but he fought. Only twelve years and he has finished a Task. I can see why he doesn't want to leave the comfort of Tawar to go to Beorn considering what happened last time.

Oh good Mithrandir is back. He is alwgoodgood for elves. Legolas is now fey, dangerous and feral in the wizards eyes. Nice image. His personality is more intense. Solitude could certainly have that effect on one. So this is like a sign for Legolas. He has finished one Task and here Mithrandir presents him with another. Much harder and more dangerous but he'll think of something. I liked the wizards surprise when Legolas used the term Tawar. Also when Legolas used him as a messenger to the warriors. Tit for tat here.

Great revealing going on here. It was good. giggle
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From ANON - giggle on March 24, 2004
Chapter 5 part 2
How did you learn to find your voice, your style? In other hands this might have sounded like a travelogue or nature show but it just reads as perfectly normal. Not many writers can handle so much adverbage or adjectiveage. I know those aren't really words. I just made them up.

He is now indigenous to the forest. A part of the flora and fauna. This is where he belongs. I see the wood elves like this. When the Sindarin came they gathered the silvan elves into a realm but the wood elves are still a part of the forest itself. In a way Legolas is going back to his roots. Pun intended.

The eagle and tree "for you" was beautiful. I saw a "Forrest Gump" feather just floating down. He has learned the value of what the forest gives. His clothing comes from the forest's bounty, his food, his very emotional sustenance. Of course he is a clever elf who made the clever clasp. Another naked elf scene too. Can't get too much of that. At least I don't think so. You know he might just love this type of life even more. If he smiled rarely as a prince he must not have been that happy.

A dozen years at this so far. Time flies whether you are having fun or not. Time must have a totally different meaning when you are immortal.

As far as the Tasks of Release, I would imagine other elves in his position must have just killed themselves so this whole Judgement thing must not come up too often. So he might be right, rather than deal with knowing his death might close a door they never wanted open in the first place, his death might be preferable. I hope that made sense. It did to me but it is very complicated reasoning.

I liked Fearfaron finally giving up on trying to teach Legeolas how to be helpful. He was a warrior and I doubt warriors built too many flets. Much better to have him work on the Tasks of Release so his son can be in Mandos' Halls.

OOH That Pool of Sorrows elf ils really icky. Do they have perverted elves also? What torment he has put the poor elf through all these years. By the end of 72 years this guy will be totally off his rocker.

Good. Back to becoming one with TawaGoinGoing in among the elves must be such a burden now to bear. Being a pariah has never been a walk in the park and with the icky elf it must be hell. He can find comfort and purpose in Tawar. Seeing the forest for the first time. Living in it, fighting for the realm, all these things now focus down to the suffering Tawar has been going through all this time. He is becoming a real wood elf. He has eateeater cause then his redemption and the release of the dead warriors. I liked that the other warriors have been watching him and have begun aiding him. Also that the forest helps warn him when the orcs get near.

Good chapter as always. Now we have to suffer through a trip to town. I don't look forward to this. giggle

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