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From ANON - giggle on March 24, 2004
Chapter 4
I am double spacing because I find it hard to read a large review that is single spaced.

Here we have Gandalf Stormcrow, bringer of ill gotten goods this time. Always gathering his bits and pieces to make into a whole for his mission in Middle Ear

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Great scene with the king and Gandalf here. The kind that makes you want to smack certain hardhearted, cold blooded, imperious royalty. Of course the other realms have to know about the change of succesion. And we have to blow off the Crown Prince's arranged marriage mate. I bet she is glad to have this disgrace not touch her. All right. Legolas will be allowed back after the time is up but the king is coldly indifferent. A real loving family moment here.

I loved the "not to be spoken of" in the king's stables but gossip seems to be as inherent in elves as other races. How leveling. The trout swimming through water was great imagery.

OK now we have some help for the poor damaged elf. A healer should be able to heal anyone who needs help. Although I didn't like her comment about since he has chastisement, read torture here, he will have need of her healing services fairly frequently. Now to the nitty gritty. I like the way you slowly unveil this. Like it would be in real life. Not huge chunks of exposition for us to digest. These elves are wild and dangerous indeed in your AU. Not at all the good folk Tolkien spoke of. That seems to just be a veneer for a very pagan outlook on life. I can go with that.

Lots of blame here to go around. They seem to be kind of steeped in guilt. Death in battle is as much a matter ofk ask as skill. So Malten will go fight in the most dangerous area to atone for his failings.

I think it is very interesting that the elves here do not accept the blessings of the Valar. They are suspicious of Valinor and the Halls of Waiting. After all no one comes back to tell them what it is like there. Unless you believe that Glorfindel of Imladris is the same as Glorfindel of Gondolin and since he is a Noldor they wouldn't believe him. You can't believe Calequendi if you are a Morequendi. I need to take a deep breath here. Lovely unraveling going on.

The whole pattern of his green universe so utterly destroyed by one little stephat hat a cry for hindsight. Life's like that unfortunately. Why I doI do that, say that, not do that? You can go nuts over these types of things.

So Malthen wants them all to have a clean death so they can meet in the Halls of Mandos after having exculpated their sins. Good Luck with that one. At least he brought Legolas' pack and knife. Oh his bow was burnt with the bodies, nice touch. Not sure what the hair thing was about but having picked up a few things already I will kind of tuck that away for future reference.

Another great and calm (this time) chapter. I realize we are on the roller coaster now and we won't be getting off till the end. Take a deep breath. giggle

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From ANON - giggle on March 24, 2004
Chapter 3
Well this one was a heartbreaker. Lots of torment, both physical and emotional here. Naked elf though. Oh my. Sorry. Got carried away and drifted from the seriousness of what is going on.

OK getting the story all set up here. And what a set up. You have made the introduction so interesting.

Fearfaron - Truly grieving for his son. Very dignified and consumed with loss in an almost gentle way.
Lindcalon and mother - Claiming the title and position of prince for her son. Good move.
Pool of Sorrow - Whose name I could not spell. These names defeat me, sorry. A slightly unhinged elf here. Celibacy and chastisement when he needs it. Sounds rough to me.

They burned his lovely locks. Sigh. Oh well it will grow. I tell myself that every time I get a bad hair cut.

All alone, beaten tpulppulp, banished, degraded, demoted, naked. Not a good day, not a good day at all.

He did lose his rank and title, glad that didn't bother him in your story. No bow and quiver. He must feel really naked without those. Does he get to come back when um 24 x 3 um let's times that and carry that and OK, 72 years is over? Or do they hope that with no bow he will get killed? HMMM interesting.

I am glad I am rereading this. I missed a lot in just the first three chapters. Your work is really dense and I was reading really fast the first time because it was just so intriguing. This will undoubtedly increase my appreciation of what you are posting now. You really worked on putting a real puzzle together for us. Thank you. giggle
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From ANON - giggle on March 24, 2004
Chapter 2
So the archer is acknowledged by the men of Laketown to be the one who bought Beorn enough time to attack and kill Blog. The elves have a different view of this unfortunately.
Ah so Mithrandir/Gandalf is here and he can clear things up. Ick a broken jaw, knife slash across the chest and a bad arm and these aren't like the major chest wound. They weren't self inflicted. Oh yes an elf that falls on his face. Dream on. I don't think I would want to upset the Woodland King either. Those wood elves, dangerous and wild after all.

The elven archer is very serious about ending his life. More than serious actually panic stricken to do so. This scene was very poignant. They took his knife, his release and salvatioin, and tied him to the bed. Wow.
The elves waiting in silence for the battle field debt to be paid. AU and very good. Hearing the prayer and willing his end and then to be disappointed. Those three paragraphs made me shiver.

So Mithrandir doesn't know the wood elves as much as he probably would like. He hasn't a clue, except he knows they really shouldn't interfere. But if it is not to be spoken of how could Mithrandir help? Catch-22 here.

Now the proclamation. The king seemed a little harsh here but they have their own ways. I did wonder when there was to be no Halls of Mandos for him now, why they almost beat him to death. He might just die from his brutal treatment and join those three wandering. Great proclamation though. Had real gravitas and pomp to it even though it was in a human town. Very elvish. I am taking notes here for the pop quiz.

And now we have the first inkling of who this sniper might be. giggle
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From ANON - giggle on March 24, 2004
I noticed how many hits you had gotten for your story and then how many reviews. They do not seem commensurate with all the work you have done. I understand the hits. This is truly a complex, well thought out, dense and thoroughly researched tale. As far as the amount of reviews, I can also understand that. The very reasons that make this so enjoyable to read makes it difficult to review. Except for please write more. I decided to go through chapter by chapter and review what I liked the most until I have caught up to where I began reviewing. I have been doing that with a lot of authors whose work I truly enjoy. This will up your count a little and stop the nagging feeling that I have not been properly eciaeciative.'
I will admit I have an ulterior motive. In the last four chapters some things have come up that I missed on the first reading of early chapters that turned out to have some importance. This is to refresh my somewhat unretentive mind. So here goes.

Chapter 1
A very bloody set up here. What battle doesn't degenerate into chaos as soon as it starts? Using no names was a good way to start. We wonder who this affects, whether we should be on the snipers side or case, and who we should be rooting for.
The way it is set up it does seem to be the sniper's "fault" that the goblin king (I think of "Labyrinth" when I see that) wasn't taken down. Oh if it were only going to be this simple.
After getting beat up I am on the snipers side and then we get the big moment elf suicide, well attempted elf suicide. I don't think the professor approved of elf suicide but it did happen on more than one occasion in the Sil so I can accept it here.
Now the poor elf is in the hands of men who do not understand what is at stake here. We do and it is going to be a bumpy ride. gi gig
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From ANON - giggle on March 23, 2004
Chapter 54 part 2
I have tried to review twice so let's hope that third time is the charm. I kept getting a too busy signal.
You are so good at this type of writing. Lovely chapter with Elrond's thoughts while he is handling the arrowhead. A little on the obssessed side, actually this elf may be a little northwest of normal here or are all Peredhil this way? A little of the human in them?
So he took a little memento to remember TawarWaith by. Was this for sentimental reasons or for a sly as a fox, just in case, a hedge for the future type of thing. Perhaps he is thinking ahead for evidence if needed. Now he seems to be caught like a bee in a jam jar. Just wanted to get a little work done, had a plan when we started but now buzzing, buzzing and not able to pull himself out of this. Well good. I like to think of the biter being bit, big time. Is this getting a little "Fatal Attraction" here? You know stalkers, peeping tom pictures, logs of where theperson you obssess about is at every minute of the day? Dead, boiled rabbits. No wait that is the movie.
I loved the herd of goats bursting into flames. I would get a little po'ed at Elrond too far daydreaming on my watch. Getting every detail. Oh yeah!! Right!
So funny. Elrond has set all of Imladris and probably 'Lorien on it's collective ear. His carefully crafted cover story shot full of holes by his very own nit picking detail oriented daughter. Women are prone to do this. The divorce courts are full of guys nevenever realized how detail oriented their wives were. Snort.
Good. Erestor is having some fun. I wonder if this was part of the deal. Erestor takes part in this rather dodgy foray and gets a nice vacation with his lovers in 'Lorien for it.
I get to say poor somebody else for a change. Poor Elladan. He must be beside himself. Another black mark on Elrond's moral ledger. Wheee!
Then Elrond has the gall to curse Legolas, Ninglorien and Thranduil plus their lineage. You 't l't learn too soon to push the blame onto someone else. Go look in the mirror Peredhil. There is the elf that is to blame for your woes. At least he says he will never forgive himself if something happens to his sons. I'm sure he will be able to shift the majority of the blame to someone else. He is already trying.
Still daydreaming, still obssessing.
Glorfindel isn't. His elven mind is just cranking away. A true tactitian's mind at work here. Bingo. He got it. Now what can, will, should he do with this little prize piece of information. Only the future will tell us what you have in store for that.
Elrond at this point is acting a lot like a love sick teenager with a crush. Legolas' name picked out on the names of books on their spines, yes. Fondling a memento of their beloved one in his pocket, yes. A lock of hair to cling to, yes. Then blushing like a teenager when confronted, oh my yes, yes, yes.
One thing. He sure isn't acting like the nutjob who was in Mirkwood.
You seem able to always throw us a curve ball and get things stirred up quite nicely. I enjoy that a lot. Keep up the good work. This must not be an easy story to work out. So many layers and levels. Great. giggle

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From ANON - giggle on March 18, 2004
Chapter 53 part 1
This is getting so long and complicated that I am going to try to number each review. That way I can keep it straight.
All this trouble just to go potty? I think he should save what little energy he has for something important. I have always envied guys the ease with which they can urinate. It is such a hassle when you're hiking.
Fearfaron is right. The fact that Legolas can get grumpy now shows he has a little more strength.
Legolas captive, unclad, in bed. Be still my beating heart. Could it get much better than this. I don't think so.
At least he promised to stay in bed except for potty time.
Nice clothes. Raw silk, spun by Mirkwood spiders perhaps? Wool, maybe cashmereangoangora. We want the softest and finest next to that marble skin we read so much about. I am so glad that Fearfaron takes such good care of him. He certainly deserves it. Getting him such nice things even when he might not be able to afford it. Of course sunny yellow and easy on/off like for an elfling are not to the prince's liking but his biological adar would give him rags so he'd better appreciate this.
For some reason having Fearfaron carrying Legolas to bed was just so sweet. I am gald you gave us a little light and love here. I was getting major depression from all this angst and political maneuvering.
Having said that we are now into angst time again. Poor Legolas, caught between two angry, merciless, powerful elf lords who will squash him like a bug if it suits their purposes.
Of course we realize that Fearfaron is treading a tightrope here. Having to balance his love and devotion to Legolas with the reality of the situation left him little recourse in his actions. He wants to save Legolas' life and return him to a life worth living. He has a lot of opposition to this goal right now. Legolas is in deep doo doo, the scientific explanation, and Thranduil is on the rampage as only he can be.
Cold, calculating and very careful. This king is certainly one to be reckoned with. Ready to sacrifice a lot to get his way. As long as it never gets near to him. I think that bothers me a lot. The fact that he plotted the deaths of his own warriors to get rid of his son. Talk about a kinslayer.
And now in Legolas' absence he seems to have been set up in direct opposition to his father. This is not going to be a good thing. I think Fearfaron would take Legolas away and the two could just live quietly together if that could be a reality. It can't be but it is a nice dream
Then the last part about Elrond. The whole letters from Elrond taking away any chance of Legolas ever having a happy family and doing so knowing that all this is a lie on his part. Elrond's obsession with this vendetta must be consuming his soul. That was very nice if he actually had a soul. Lovely writing.
Legolas being Elrond's weapon of choice and here we get back to Legolas feeling of self asteem. His sense of non-existence. Elronds continued hurting and humiliating the prince from his secluded haven of Imladris. Back to bottom of the food chain time again. Poor prince. I say that so much in reviews of your chapters but it is true.
Well I better get busy with part deux and then go moan from angst. giggle
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From ANON - louise_oblique on March 15, 2004
'The Lord of Imladris was blushing.' he he that was good. love this fic so so so so much

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From ANON - louise_oblique on March 15, 2004
Fantastic and wonderfully writen

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From ANON - Kryspen on March 12, 2004
narcolinde!

How could I have missed this fic?! I have been reading it every chance I could get non-stop from the beginning all week... and AT WORK! [Thank the powers that be for jump drives and cube walls ^_^]

Impressive, brilliant in its depth of character and emotion, intelligent, well-written, I LOVE it! Well done...

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From ANON - Calenharn Elflover on March 08, 2004
At last, someone in a position of power, who has some sympathy for Legolas! Can it be, can they really reverse the Judgement? Hope at last! But what price will Legolas have to pay....

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From ANON - giggle on March 08, 2004
Sheesh! The politics of the Woodland Realm sound much to much like the politics today. Also judicial systems today. What a mesI knI know that you know where all this is going but my head hurts when we get into too much machinations.
I like the counsellf. lf. He seems to have his eyes on what is truly at stake and would like to see Thranduil taken off his high horse. If any of the elves are left alive that could testify for Legolas I would be surprised. It seems that the king has been busy packing the warrior army and court with his sycophants and killing everyone else.
So Elrond is going to get his hands slapped. Very funny. I would greatly enjoy that.
I thought the scene of fun at the end was a nice one. We need a little break from all this doom and gloom. Let's face it if angst is all Legolas has to look forward to Valinor would look very good to him when all this is said and done. If he has no ties to keep him here, like repatriating feas, then he would want to get out. At least go live in the Tawar and just come visit Fearfaron in the dark of the night and not be see any anyone else.
On to better things I hope. We need a little lightening up before the heavy guns come into play. giggle
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From ANON - giggle on March 08, 2004
Oh my Aragorn just stepped in it now. Things are slowly building up to a confrontation of truly horrific proportions. I for one can't wait. Unless it hurts Legolas too much for him to bear of course. Well things have always turned out badly for him so this has a good probablility of doing so as well.
Poor Lindcalon (sp?), such an innocent still while believing he is so mature. He has a lot to learn about twisty turny things that have been going on right under his nose. Finding out his father was murdered in a plot to get rid of the crown prince is going to be hard for him to take.
I didn't realize that Malthen was supposed to be Legolas' bodyguard. I thought he was a personal guard to Ninglorien and accompanied her to Imladris and whenever she went gallivanting all over Middle Earth. This really ups the squick factor of Legolas' non-con by him. I fully intend to re-read this once it is done but I really don't want to go back and try to find little snippets I have missed yet but this was a little bit of a revelatioin for me.
At least you gave us a break from the absolutely rock bottom angst that was the last chapter. I still haven't recovered from that one. giggle
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From ANON - sarah on March 06, 2004
Hello,

I wish I wasn't so dense and could figure out the conclusion they've arrived at! I'm faint with curiosity here.

Very exciting.

The news of the ring is out.

Sarah.

if this is true, it is unconscionable! The plotting of such acts! What punishment could we exact for so devious a scheme?" he railed in distress. "It is one thing to bring about death through carelessness or incompetence, but quite another to do so through malice! This would rend out peoples' very soul, to acknowledge such betrayal is possible against one's own!"

"I agree the treachery is beyond anything I would have thought any Wood Elf capable of conceiving, yet I do not think Legolas would demand any retribution. As for me, I want only for this dread decree to be lifted from him; surely he has been punished enough even before the Judgement."

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From ANON - louise_oblique on March 06, 2004
very very good, wow just wow. oh cool website to

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From ANON - Nancy on February 29, 2004
Good morning. I have enjoyed the Feud so far, up to chapter 50. I look forward to reading the rest. I want to see how you reconsile Elrond & Les. s. How Aragorn confronts Elrond? How Thranduil eats his words againts Legolas. Thank you for writing such a complex and thrilling story.

Nancy
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