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By : ZeDrippyVessel

From ANON - Juliette on March 21, 2005
"Save a horse. Ride a Rohirrim." Can I get that on a bumper sticker?

Wow, that was truly spectacular Zee! I feel like I need a cigarette, and I don't even smoke! Gamling and Aefre are hot.

Also thanks for letting Theoden get the hook-up, esp. as we know what's waiting for him. And Eomer got two lusty wenches? That boy's just greedy. Looking forward to your next update!
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From ANON - DJ Sparkles on March 21, 2005
This is just so cool! Well written, well drawn out, very nice indeed! I can't wait for more, and this one of Tolkien's rather neglected characters! And I loved what you did with Theoden and his lady... more soon please!
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From ANON - Shanastay on March 15, 2005
AAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!! You are FAR worse than me with the cliffhangers!!!!! YOu HORRID HORRID tease!!!!! Love it. *bows* My dear, as always, you are and were the inspiration for me starting my own stories. I wish you well and patiently await more!
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From ANON - Juliette on March 07, 2005
WOW! Zee, that was, well, it was just so...WOW! Got to be one of the best and hottest love scenes I have read in a very long time, and we haven't even gotten to the consummation yet. Please update soon so we can have the rest!
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From ANON - Nakhti on February 28, 2005

***Speechless! Yes! Yes! Finally! Who's the Rider? Tell me Who IS the Rider...***

Hehehehe! YES! You are absolutely back on top form with Gamling�s little silent asides- I missed them in the last few chapters, but I�m glad to see you keeping up the pace in this one. I just LOVE this variation of �Who�s the daddy?� That phrase just seems so incongruous with the language and tone of Tolkein that its frickin hilarious when Gamling thinks it!

"It's all right, Bawdewyne, I swear it. Behind this scowling visage-"

***...don't you dare, don't you dare say I'm gentle or tender or...***

"-nice and caring-"

***...dammit! B�ma, can I kill her, please? It will be quick and merciful...***

"-man."

***...DAMMIT!***

HAHAHA!!! Oh my god� *howls with laughter*

"I'll bet his leggings aren't even decently laced!"

***... well, now that you mention it, it is a bit breezy in the southern part of the Riddermark...scowl dammit... grrrrr...***

*Howls some more, clutching spleen in pain*

�You should have seen him bouncing about like a rabbit, trying to peer over my shoulder."

*applauds wildly* oh what a brilliant image this plants in my mind! I love, just absolutely LOVE the way you describe things so vividly yet so succinctly. Your dialogue is also perfectly judged, sharp and witty, and full of character- even the character of Cynn the blacksmith you manage to convey in about three sentences (Loved the bit when he said �I�ll work his arse off�!)

Wow, I think I loved that chapter- a lot. I love the way (have i said 'love' enough yet?) you manage to make it funny and light hearted and sweet with lots of witty banter and sexual tension, but still have the guts to introduce some serious stuff, some poignant and touching issues about war, and then at the end you top it all off by tying it in with the film. You are nothing short of brilliant. NOW WRITE MORE!!!!

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From ANON - Juliette on February 28, 2005
Very good chapter, liked the refugee camp setting, was wondering how they were getting along. Glad to see that Gamling has promised to get them off the hill and into better shelter before the war starts, and that the little blacksmith boy has found a home. I like how Gamling and Aefre have decided to interfere in Eomer's love life after the war (if you are hinting that you are going to write Eomer/Lothiriel with Gamling and Aefre in it, I say go for it, it sounds great.) As for Gamling and Aefre being old, I can't agree. I think both are in their *prime,* as Miss Jean Brodie would say! More story soon please!
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From ANON - Juliette on February 14, 2005
Uh oh! Where's Aefre off to? Please update soon! Liked how she tended his eye too, and it's always fun to read Gamling's thoughts when he's around her.
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From ANON - atanpalpa on February 07, 2005
Have been a fan of your work for a long time, though I don't usually review. *shame on me* Great beginnings here. Love what your doing.
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From ANON - Juliette on February 07, 2005
Yay, update! I'm so glad, I know it wasn't a terribly long time between new chapters, but it seemed like it to me. I loved the battle with the morningstar, and how Gamling punished the Riders for their talk about Aefre. Little Merry, soaking up battle techniques like a hobbit-sized sponge, techniques he willl so soon need to utilize. As far as I'm concerned, you can take whatever time you need to build up Aefre and Gamling's relationship before they "get their freak on." If you pardon the pun, I'm enjoying the ride! I never thought of this as "porn," I consider it a well-written fic with some juicy love scenes to come (ouch, that's another really bad pun!) I'm very pleased to read a fic about Rohan, I love the Rohirrim and there are not enough good Rohan fics out there. More soon please!
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From ANON - Beranhaele on February 07, 2005
Another well written chapter in 'Angel of the Morningstar' here :) I think it's particularly clever how you worked it in foreshadowing that the sparing between Aefre and Eowyn was with the same weapon as used by the Witchking at the Battle of Pelenor, and that you had mention of Merry in there, being quiet... and unobtrusive... and learning EVERYTHING he'll need in just a little while. ;)

And as far as the pleas of many... pfft! Let them stew in their own drool if need be. If they're so desperate for smut, let them look elseplace for it. There are those of us out there who look forward to an earned reward, rather than instant gratification. Write the stroy to suit your own tastes and satisfy yer own muse and you'll be fine.

In ending...

"Fremu faegere awritan" Rohirrm(Olde English) for 'good deed well written'
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From Rous on February 07, 2005
I do have to admit that I was not expecting this. Compared to a couple of your other stories I have read, this is seemingly boring. However, it is just what I like. The battle, the buildup. Tumbling right into bed is not as satisfying. I suppose we all know how this will end, but the journey is by far the more exciting aspect of the tale. I do have to say that had you not made Gamling's comments all in his mind, it would have come out very cartoonish. The way he keeps a running dialogue in his head is screamingly funny. I did not read your reviews, but I gathered from your response that someone commented on adult fiction. One of my pet peeves when reading is the assumption that mature, and/or married persons do not enjoy a healthy relationship. My favorite stories, allbeit rare as they are, contain portrayals of the comfortable and relaxed interaction between real adults. So, it is with great anticipation that I will await an update. Thank you, so much, for sharing this.
Rous
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From ANON - Beranhaele on February 01, 2005
It's very well written. I have a certain fondness in my heart for the Eorlings, and it's good to see somebody write a plausible story about them. It's well crafted in all ways, much better than the slam-bam-thank-you-madam stories that seem to overpopulate any sort of adult fanfiction site. :) People too often forget that just cause a story is 'adult' doesnt mean it has to be porn! :) I think the part where she dumps the ice water over his head is especially well done. Shows that the characters are real people, rather than just 'sweet... young... things...' as he put it. Keep up the good work and I hope aff.net stays up long enough to read the rest of it.
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From ANON - Juliette on January 25, 2005
Doomed is nasty word, but I think it definitely applies to Aefre and Gamling, now that the King himself has taken a hand in their romance! Very good chapter, good to see Aefre and Eowyn practicing their battle skills in anticipation of the coming war. More soon please!
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From ANON - Talasi on January 18, 2005
Love it.....just love it! They are so spunky. Their horses suit them very well. Their interaction and dialogue (spoken and not) is absolutely fabulous! More more more more more.

Talasi
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From ANON - Juliette on January 17, 2005
Nice chapter with them getting to know each other a bit more. I liked when Gamling figured out that what Aefre wants is respect and control of her own destiny, and knew he could give her both. But what's gone wrong with her part of the Wold? More soon please!
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