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From ANON - Ansileran on January 17, 2012
Ai ! Valar ! This is pure torture... to stop there ! You are the most amazing writer I've ever read. Truly, I love your work so much better than the original one. I have just stumbled upon your story last Thursday and read it all at once, I couldn't stop !!! Everything is there : the precise, beautiful descriptions, the twisted, convoluted plot, the raw emotions... I have no word strong enough to praise you.
Not only that but the way you write in itself is superb. I have rarely found such a beauty in a text written in English, be it a fanfiction or even a published book. Your words flow like music. And I am sure I don't even appreciate it to its full extent for I am not a native speaker and can't even begin to do your work justice with the simple words of this review.

I beg you to update as soon as you can, I can't even bring myself to try and imagine the next chapter for I know the image would be pallid in comparison to your extraordinary skill. Yet I know how hard it is to keep updating so I'll just be patient and re-read those chapter again and again until you post the next one.
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From ANON - wetheril on May 16, 2007
This has got to be one of the best Legolas stories I've ever read! It's epic in telling and scope, you use incredible vocabulary (but fitting!), it has hot and steamy sex, and though a good deal of the story is very dark, there is undeniable hope as well. Even though your story is mostly serious, I really appreciate the funny moments you throw in there as well to lighten the mood. I especially enjoyed Elrond's OOC moments (via discovery from Glorfindel), since the Lord of Imladris does deserve to be taken down a notch or two every once in a while. I can't quite forgive Elrond for what he did to Legolas, but it does inspire me to read on and see what happens between them eventually.
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From ANON - wetheril on May 15, 2007
This story is just amazing in the amount of detail and constructed history, despite its AU nature. I have not finished it yet. I only started to read it yesterday, but it's really sucked me in. And did I forget to mention--the sex is really hot!
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From ANON - anonymous on November 10, 2006
I tend to agree with lauriel; the Wood Elves do not show themselves to be very noble in this story, but without some villains it would be boring,at least to me. Still, I do wonder if you plan to try and make Thranduil see the light and accept Legolas. Also, wondering how far you will go to punish Elrond. Anciously waiting!
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From ANON - lauriel on November 04, 2006
I think Thranduil must deposed like Elond. I really loved him, but your Thranduil is unrelievable, he has no heart.
Even Elond regretted and admitted his crime though just one time, but Thranduil...He knew that Legolas is innocent, but he show no regret and sorrow and remose, Cus he has not a capability to do. I'm moved when he give the ring Legolas, but next time, he is willingly to kill Legolas for Taurant ( God, if the baby needs that salvation,he must be Damian of Omen...Ha!) How did Celeborn express that horrible story just 'complex'? Only the king is just his kinsman, not Legolas? He never try to save Legolas, and then he's so generous to Thranduil, even after revealed his crime to his own brothers. Just some talking, that's all. He still support the king. Celeborn's kinsman is only Thranduil? I felt sick to him like the king.
All of the alive sindar of this fic has no dignity except Legolas. I feel so sorrow...cuz I prefer them than Noldor. To me they has real pure heart than superior Noldor.
Your sindar lack capability of apologize and amend. Thranduil never be able to love Legolas. Thranduil and coward Talagan two friend committed same crime like Malthen and Rochendil...Talagan just told Thranduil, he refused it, he also droped it, and he aimed sword to Legolas, such a captain! And they're more dutiful place than them....but they'll never be purnished.
You can not punish Elond alone, Thranduil must be purnished together. he have knew all of that, but he stii blamed Legolas before all of the kingdom for Taurant and his pride, he paied no attention of Legolas' agony. Even in the basement, he admiited his shortage pardon for Taurant and after Celeborn's horrible testomony...the king want more savation from Legolas! After all of that! (God, the ancient elf saying that story seemed so calm...he also has no ability to judge fairiy) He has no ability to love Legolas, and now I don't want it, I have no more hope for him. He's elven Grima warmtongue.
How could Taurant grown up well under the parents? Thranduil and Meril's so dity and horrible love (for our own chidren, sacrifice the other one...so dirty!) itself is already Taurant's doom. The Orcs will not be purnished in public, Taurant must get out of their orcish ways like Legolas. Not if, no matter Legolas try him to lead eldar's way, no success. He will be simmilar to Thranduil and Meril. Orc King of elven Kingdom should be no more exist.

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From ANON - #1FeudFan on October 16, 2006
OK finally she has been caught lying. Now what?
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From ANON - Tish on October 09, 2006
Well I thought the story was doomed but am glad these new chapters are here. I liked how Lindalcon was growing up through the tale but now it seems it is too much. I can't imagine how he will survive sending his Naneth to her punishment, just though it is. Seems like to punish her more innocents have to suffer.
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From ANON - maglor on October 07, 2006
that sucks. lindalcon was too easy on her. hope the council makes her suffer. what kind of punishment would her crimes merit? can't see them using execution or anything like that, and keeping her locked up amounts to the sme for an elf. so, is she going to die? what happens to the baby then? and when are we going to see that new Bench in action?
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From ANON - pam on September 12, 2006
Yey ! you updated. good chapter. I really hope you are going to updated your other stories. i like your work.
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From ANON - giggle on September 11, 2006
A/N You know when we read or watch something we are actually interacting with the characters. We can gain a lot of insight into our lives and the lives of others and perhaps find some measure of hope or understanding of our own lives, or the lives of those who impinge on our lives. But also we might find the reading or viewing to become a little too much sometimes. Too much angst, pain, to close to the bone for us. It must be even worse for the writer because s/he has to plan, nurture, cogitate and then give birth to the flights of fancy others will read/view. If this is difficult for you then kudos to you for visiting a place and time that we enjoy even if it doesn't give you unalloyed joy.

Chapter 109

The poor twins. Not only nana's death, orc elimination and the long defeat to worry about now they have atta acting like a git and running amok. I have always wondered what elves would really feel like in the situation that the twins find themselves in. They are actively seeking out orcs to destroy not just doing the odd job when they in the course of their lives run across the nasties. I wonder if they would get sick of the death, destruction; the smell of battle and of orc blood; the sound of dying and then the silence when battle is done? Well we are only Edain and can imagine but never know. I did like their mantra. That was very good.

I see Elrond is back to his old arrogant bitchy self. It is his guilt that keeps him forever one step away from ability to treat this with the appropriate sense of alarm. Pride is at the base of all his machinations. A good point you bring out is his lack of regard for his son's pain while he is out haring around trying to punish someone. Why would a mighty elf Lord want to even pull these kinds of stunts? There has to be a screw loose somewhere. The way he "sees" that he is no longer the leader in the way the warriors subtly set up the fringe to protect the twins. Better a leader who is aware and congnizant of more than himself.

I also liked the twins deferring to him out of love not because of his inherent power, Vilya not withstanding. Will Elrond become the Lore Master we know in LOTR? The one who can think long term about Arda's future not just his own desires? I am sure you will let him.

Nice big hissy fit about Callon. Now that he is dead Elrond has lost a valuable weapon. He seems to think of elves as how they can be used. Not his family I hope but all else. Was that his first mistake or just one in a long line? No weapons now of self defense. I am glad the twins are not on the same page as he is. They view the damage done by kinslaying but the others are right. If an orc is eating me you can kill me with alacricity.

I like the twins being at loggerheads with Elrond. They still have their honour and I want Elrond to lose it all. Honor, respect, the unalloyed love of his family, they will love him but not as unconditionally after this. I want all this so that he has to work hard to get it back. I want him diminished so that he will learn valuable lessons that will influence him for the good. I want him to regain most but not all of what he has lost. In his own eyes I want him to realize the good will, love, respect, honour he threw away for nothing in the end.

I do wonder if the Valar had anything to do with Callon's death. He was certainly eager to testify against Legolas and publically besmirch his name for one so reformed. And for what? The opportunity to gain a little in Imladris. He must not have really realized how the wind sat in Elrond's corner to throw all his weight behind a Lord that was in dire straights and likely to lose this little set-to. In the end he did deserve death, even if it was a horrible one. He can stay in the Hall's of Waiting and cleanse himself before he returns to Aman and has to interact with elves once again.

As far as the King not accepting his son and desiring a reason to publicly humiliate Legolas. Well the tide has certainly turned for that and Elrond hasn't sailed. He will find a very different tone now from the Woodland Realm. Won't Elrond be surprised? Now that the King recognizes Legolas as his son things will be very different. He might want to use all the information he has to expose Elrond as the despoiler of his son from his very birth, Elrond used every means at his disposal to ruin the realm from seducing the queen to besmirching his son and heir at so young an age. I can just see Elrond's reaction to that. All that he has done being exposed to the select Council and not able to lie or talk his way out of that one. Wow. That would be good. Thranduil could use this as a way to assuage his own guilt over his treatment of Legolas and ease it onto Elrond leaving him agape. Elrond caught in the web of deceit he wove. Talk about poetic justice. Could Elrond deny the truth? Not possible with the elves that he is going to be dealing with.

So it is all public now among the little group and really although Elrond is upset and dismayed he is the one who has been repeatedly digging his own pit after all. After one has finally told the secrets that are burdening one, one feels so much better. Much as Elrond felt until he walked into that little meeting. See how nicely I distanced that from myself. As if I never had to do that type of thing. And if you believe that I have some great land on the Gulf Coast that is now dry twice a day I would like to sell you. Elrond is letting down everyone who has ever had regard for him, loved him, respected him, looked for leadership and guidance from him, depended on him in any way. Power corrupts and absolute power (Vilya) corrupts absolutely. Wallowing in self pity and self deceit only proves it. This is getting very Shakespearean here. The fall of a powerful and gifted leader to the absolute basest, bereft forlorn elf. I love it. A real slap in the face for someone so arrogant.

Now how did he betray Ningloriel? Was it by condemning her son by claiming him as his own? Thus destroying any chance of happiness for Legolas? Or was it by physically despoiling him and treating him as an object to be used, abused and discarded? Or by both perhaps?

More Shakespeare now. The Dark Lord could not oust him but his sons did. If he weren't wallowing here he could see that he is the one who let go the reins of power himself while he was out cavorting around and trying to continue his crafty undermining of the Woodland Realm. He really did you know.

Elrond is lost and alone. Like the song about Gollum. Now we need the meeting where Thranduil can get his own back and revel in it then he can in turn get levelled by his past. Payback is a bitch.
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From ANON - Maelleconstance on September 09, 2006
An update! Aaaww sweet Ellen, you don't know how much that means to me! You still are a master at understanding the dynamics of this strained relationship between Elrond and his sons. Poor Elrond! I fear for him. He really doesn't get that it's his own actions and words that are sending his sons away from him. He needs a good epiphany and soon! I can't wait to see what will happen when they reach Mirkwood. You are still the best, sweet friend!

Hugs,
Maelle.
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From ANON - trytoobeeornot2b on September 07, 2006
Yeay an update! !
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From ANON - giggle on September 04, 2006
Chapter 108

I've caught up. Yippee.

So now Erestor remembers all. I am glad. The scene with the rings was so funny. Erestor suffers from an uncommon complaint amoung elves. Elven foot in elven mouth disease. How on Arda Erestor could possibly be Elrond's right hand elf is hard to imagine. I did like the "propriety and reputation" considering he doesn't really have one and "get the ring on his hand or suffer wrath." Now that one I do believe in 100%.

I love Legolas' reactions. He is just like a giddy elfling then Erestor almost ruins it by his disease but he made a very good save. Legolas just wants to be happy. Not too much to ask. The double entendre was great. But the self esteem issues raise their ugly head again. And I agreed with Legolas that you don't want to give Thranduil a chance at owning someone through an unhoused fea caught/trapped in your ring. When the ring did it's thing there it really frightened both elves. I think the Valar did it myself.

The ring scene was truly lovely, funny and touching at the same time. And of course the rest of the chapter was lovely also;o) So now they are truly bonded and ready for all the angst ahead. Whew that was a hot one and we still have the bench in the kitchen. It is a good thing that elves have tremendous stamina.
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From ANON - giggle on September 03, 2006
Chapter 107 (I hope)

I feel so sorry for Legolas. He just has to take all blame upon himself. He says the Valar are unfuriated with Thranduil's deeds but Legolas is the one who has to pay. The ill luck that has plagued him has now fallen onto the elflings. One reaps what one has sown. Thranduil and Meril in their own ways have sown the wind and will reap the whirlwind. The ones closest to them, the elflings, will be right in the way of this storm. Legolas did not put them there and even his best might not be good enough to completely protect them in the long run.

Erebor just won't fade away will it. Blaming it on Maltahondo isn't going to work. It truly is an illusion. Everyone is trying to conceal the truth and the truth will out no matter how many try to gainsay that. Even if Tawarwaith tries to prevent the truth Erebor won't end until he lets truth happen. There will be no peace for Greenwood, Tawarwaith or the Danwaith if this isn't exposed.

He had no friends as an elfling so he turned to the Sentinel. Tawar already was favouring Legolas. How much his fortunes have changed. The Gate Keeper and the soldiers accepting him as if nothing had happened.

I liked his thinking about seducing Erestor. After all it has been how many days now? I think sometimes that Legolas is a bi-polar elf. The path of light fades to despair and the songs of the chorus are bittersweet because he is so unsure of his Erestor. The spirit of Tawar like a wood sprite gave him a nice pick me up at least.

Now this part I really liked. They were at such cross purposes because they were being so careful to not blow this very important meeting. If not for the horse they might have stayed there all night. Like the horse we were ready for some action and did we get it.

Erestor really helped Legolas see things from a different perspective. He feels sorry for the crowd and yet the crowd let him suffer for such a long time. Then we get to the emeralds. Wow they were from Beleriand. Well in this story they are. What a treasure.

Then they get their own bench and finally it gets down to the nitty gritty. I will not fade, which is a barefaced lie. If Erestor is denied to him he will. Legolas reminds me of a child who has been told all his life he just isn't good enough. Everything that goes wrong is his fault. He then grows up to believe just that. He will never be good enough to deserve love, peace, and understanding.

I was glad that Erestor was so open about the two Galadrhim warriors, that they were never bonded. He used them in a way which isn't very noble but then Erestor does have a rather randy reputation. I think the two care for him enough that they want his best interests to win out. They might be happy not to have a third wheel anymore. They can go back to their old life. They must have cared very much about Erestor to allow him into their relationship all this time. Legolas has every right not to share. He has never had anything really good in his life up till this point. He needs this as much as Erestor does.

And Erestor does re-educate Legolas as to his body and those scars. They are a minus in Legoas' eyes but to Erestor they are a badge of honor. How much Legolas has endured but has survived.

And in the end he remembered. The name he was searching for in such futility was there all along - Pen-rhovan. Sigh.
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From ANON - giggle on September 02, 2006
Chapter 106

What a lovely chapter.

So Legolas ran not out of joy from receiving the ring but out of fear that the king would rescind his gift. These two will probably never really understand one another. This ring is to signify a Sinda-silvan/Noldor union and the king's probable reaction frightens him but doesn't deter him. I think the king may not like it but is powerless to stop it and since his subjects think this is great he no longer can gainsay it. I agree that the opportunity to annoy the king is just too good to pass up.

The elflings were just great. Like younglings everywhere they just say what comes to mind. And Legolas was very good with them. If you show a youngster a shiny nickel or a dime they will choose the nickel. The dime is smaller and not as grand. The same with these two. The sparkly gems are much grander than Legolas' heart's desire was. Yet the band represents more than the emeralds could ever hope for him. The young ones certainly knew all the gossip to be had circling the stronghold. When you have a closed community gossip is the lubricant to interactions.

He refuses to be a Lord again. Although Leaf Lord and Fish Leaf are just fine with him. Add them to Tirno, Tawarwaith and of course Legolas. Lots of names for one elf.

Oh Oh Gildin seems to be a problem for Legolas' plan. He is so fixed on this plan and will do eveything he can to make it come to pass. I do feel sorry for Gildin if Meril gets her claws on him. She would never tell Thranduil that this warrior is anywhere near the stronghold. That is if she knows what he knows. Here comes Ben'waeth. She is going to be the sand in the gears if she possibly can. I wonder if Meril would murder her? Probably if she thought she could get away with it.

Now we have Talagan. I have mixed feelings about him. He is the king's best friend but he seems to have had just about enough. That means the king will figure out a way to whack him. The fact that Legolas can rename a horse just because of his new status I found amusing. He is no Lord, has no company yet the whole of the silvan elves would follow him just like his grandfather was followed at Dagorlad. I hope that the end result is much much better. And this is just what the king is afraid of. That he will become a token king only with his erstwhile son becoming the real ruler of Mirkwood.

Talagan takes orders from Legolas despite the fact that the king would want to know that Gildin is here and ready to talk. The king has no supreme right any longer. His fate and future are now bound to his despised first child. I love it so much. I am gloating and rubbing my hands together.

What a nice ride for Tirno. He is ablaze with moondust and trodding on moonstones. Fearfaron has planned well and Legolas hopes his most fervent desires come true but true to his nature he doubts it. Emptyness or fulfillment? More angst.

I only have one more chapter to go and I will be caught up. Then I must go start the one with all the philosophy or math or something. I like the story but I am flummoxed by all the technical stuff. Say math and my brain switches off for self protection. But I will do my best.
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