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Reviews for Continuation: Fifteen Years in Lothlorien

By : Ertia

From ANON - MarzBar on April 21, 2006
I hope Legolas manages to rescue Rumil so Haldir and Celeborn will not be so angry with him. We are waiting to find out the nasty men's goal in this attack or how they plan to accomplish it. Legolas and Seldayan are pretty funny together. More story please.
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From LonelyWhisper on April 20, 2006
Damn read only archive. I can't get to it on my computer either, but a friend can. Evil.

So I'll read this as soon as they get the bugs worked out. I can't get to my fics either.
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From ANON - Nim on April 20, 2006
Another great chapter, even with no sex!

I was thinking when the evil men are captured, the elves would cut off their hair, too - but men probably don't value hair as much as elves do. But perhaps if they removed the hair from another part of the men's bodies, with a nice sharp knife, and a few well-intended slips of the blade...Santgalas would step up to the plate, I'm sure!

"Hot yummy sweet Haldir/Legolas/Illiene threesomes, maybe?" Haldir SWEET? Is this a secret side of Haldir you're going to reveal? Sort of James Bond type - tough on the outside, but soooo romantic in bed? OK, OK, I need a fan! Or a Haldir of my very own!

Eagerly awaiting the next chapter, Ertia!

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From ANON - Nim on April 14, 2006
Eeeeek! Orophin lost his beautiful hair! I hope he didn't lose anything else! Will Haldir gallantly cut off some of his hair, to make a wig for Orophin while his hair grows back? I can't picture Orophin in a knit cap, or adopting the Vin Diesel look....

When Orophin improves physically, will Celeborn send Legolas to Orophin for some sexual healing? Please?

And what of Rumil? I shudder to think what the men have done to him!

Is there any of that dwarven ale left? I need something to sooth my nerves while awaiting the next chapter!
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From ANON - nikkiling on April 13, 2006
Wow! You seem to have gotten some interesting reviews! LOL People are so silly.
Well, I love this story, I love the darker aspects (elsewise I might not love it as much :D ), I love your writing, and I'm so happy to finally see more!!!!! I have complete faith in your storytelling abilities, and while I would LOVE to know what was wrong with Haldir, I know you will get to it when you get to it. I love the suspense! hehehe
Poor Orophin though... I can't wait to see what will happen to him!
(OMG! I just used the word love six times in one review... I think it's a new record!!)
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From ANON - Tux on April 12, 2006
Whoa, what's with the sporkage? Doesn't 'don't like, don't read' mean *anything* anymore? *Sigh*

Keep writing, m'dear, you have many fans eagerly awaiting more!

(Though you'll have *me* after you if R�mil and Orophin aren't ok! *Grin*)
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From ANON - Tuxedo Elf on April 12, 2006
*Strangled scream* You'd better make him alright again! Poor, Poor Orophin! Be nice to R�mil too!

Excellent chapter btw. lol

Tux
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From ANON - Anon on April 12, 2006
Thanks for another wonderful chapter Ertia! Speaking for the sadism crowd, thanks for playing to us! One has to wonder about this new fellow, this Seldayan character; how unfortunate for him that the sight of another elf beaten and broken inspires nausea and unease instead of sympathy or valor. I almost wanted to say, 'Jeez, dude, pull it together and do something useful. Does the pampered life of cortesan serving the entire company of border guards lead to such? I would think he's use to seeing injuries, etc, or other not-so-nice things. Yes, and i will add my voice to the chorus of "poor Orophin!" though truth be known, i rather enjoy hurting him.

Legolas, if you keep going on all those BDSM Safety websites, Celeborn is going to disconnect the DSL line in your talan, then what will you do when not spreading your legs, taking a whooping, or wiping off Missy Thing in the bathes? How many times does he have to tell you, "Those late 20th cent. rules don't apply here, now bend over."?

Gabby
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From ANON - Legolas Thranduilion on April 12, 2006
Mae Govannen Miss Nim, and a pleasant good morning to you!

Perhaps it was the dwarven ale, or perhaps it was a misunderstanding of the true aim of the story.

"The same way" is open to a number of interpretations. It could merely have meant in haste. My alter ego's memory could merely have been somewhat altered by the Stockholm Syndrome setting in -- he has the need to blame himself and view Lord Celeborn as justified. The alternative would be too terrifying, for he is completely within Celeborn's control It was also a very convenient recollection, coming so late in the story after we had all been led to believe that this Legolas was the one we know from book and movie -- gentle and kind.

Ah, but thank you. Since my alter ego seems to have fallen under the same evil spell as the rest of the Middle-earth elves in this sad tale, then Mandos take him. He deserves what he gets, and all you sadomasochists can get back to enjoying your Legolas abuse.

My understanding of BDSM is that it requires consent and that there must be the opportunity for the submissive to escape the situation should it become too intense. Of course what my git of an alter ego played with Eferell, Celeborn, and an unspecified number of Mirkwood elves was BDSM. And he didn't seem to mind at all. He didn't even seem to mind the session with Santgalas in the woods, although that became rather intense. So be it.

The issue of consent is clouded by the contract to submit signed by the so-called courtesans. There is no escape until the contract is up. That is the BDSM element that is upsetting. Since Mistress Ertia has emphasized my alter ego's distress and emotional pain at his treatment (the true submissive gets a kick out of being abused and humiliated) I fear she is playing to the sadism crowd.

Since he has now been generally agreed to be a git who deserves all he gets (What about all the others -- Celeborn, Thranduil, Santgalas, etc. ? Will they get their turn in the collar to have their sensitivity raised?) I leave you to your enjoyment of him. And to a story that glorifies any number of pernicious themes. Unlike the usual 'abuse Legolas' story, where the torturers are the villains, Mistress Ertia is encouraging us to like these elves.

You have set me free, Miss Nim, and I shall retire to another venue with a clear heart.

Ever Your Obedient Servant,

Legolas (Not an abuser of Women and still Nobody's Catamite) Thranduilion

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From ANON - Nim on April 12, 2006
Hello Legolas,

"My alter ego remembers being selfish and that's all, so let's not start a rumor." Ah, the dwarven ale must have muddled your mind.

Ertia says, "He took in the livid marks on Legolas thighs�.." Then, after Celeborn leaves, your alter ego mused, "How often at home had he taken Mirie or Ninsewel the same way, to ease his own tensions, with little regard for their satisfaction?" He took the courtesans "the same way" - I took that to mean he had been rough with them and bruised them, just like Celeborn had bruised him. And now that the shoe is on the other foot, I hope he's realizing that some of the liberties he took with coutesans may have gone too far.

I am not assuming facts not in evidence. Your alter ego recalled playing the same game with Celeborn as he had played in the Greenwood. If what he was playing with Celeborn was not BDSM, what was it? Again, I believe he palyed the game with others in the Greenwood. Does Ertia have to provide a complete listing of all his conquests to make you happy? To me, such a laundry list would be boring.

Of course, these are my thoughts on the matter - I'm sure everyone reads the story a bit differently! That's why stories and books are so much better than movies!

I hope you find it someday, Legolas. I agree with Ertia, you are a git. Ertia, please keep things as they are so we can let our imaginations run in any direction we want!
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From ANON - Legolas Thranduilion on April 11, 2006
Good day, Miss Ertia. I'm afraid I'm not at my best. Haldir and I had quite a night of it and we managed to use up all his stock of dwarvish ale he had left over from the Moria days before the balrog came. We're in the Lady Galadriel's bad books now after getting piss drunk and singing the naughty version of the Lay of Luthien under her talan. But then she had a look at this story in her mirror, and she understands where we were coming from.

Please, no more rewrites. It doesn't get any better. No spankings. I'm not into that. You remind me of the old joke:

Masochist: "Oh hurt me, please!"

Sadist:: "No."

If you want a spanking or any kind of negotiation on your contract, talk to my alter ego in Lorien or his whoremaster, child manipulating father. My Adar and I don't own slaves either.

Nope, I didn't mind the oral a few chapters ago, because I seemed to handle it just fine without gagging and nearly drowning. Not sure why it was that way this time, but I assumed either you or Celeborn were making it rougher than necessary to teach me a lesson about speaking up for myself.

I (or at least my alter ego) never minded the sex -- not even the riding crop and the nipple clamps. I minded the humiliation, which you had me angsting about. If you'd said I enjoyed Celeborn's manly assertiveness in turning me over that bed, or having Haldir sneer at me while I was strapped to that table (Oooh, Haldir!) I'd have wondered about my sanity, but I'd have accepted it as your OC AU view of my personality. Of course, I was blaming myself for having disobeyed Lady Galadriel until you made it clear it was a set up for failure that no male could have resisted. Did you notice my surprise when Iliene spilled the beans?

"Now, would you be so kind as to tell your dear Sarnlass that you ordered him not to climax and then intentionally pressured him to do so.?"

Legolas could not hold back his surprise, and knew it must show on his face."

That's me, realizing my new owners will set traps for me. That one was cute, but I seriously worried that Celeborn might be tricking me later:

""My lord." Legolas gasped, fear shooting through him. There was no right answer. A cleverly laid trap? Was Celeborn so vicious to have laid such? "

Now I'm a little scared, especially after what comes next. I realize I'm in Lorien for the next fifteen years minus three weeks, playing BDSM games without a 'safe word.' I can't exactly go home now, can I?

So, I'm only with Celeborn for the next five years, and then I get to serve the whole court or go to the borders. Will I have to service any Warden or soldier who orders me? I'm really looking forward to that!

King Thranduil's son is the warrior. King Thranduil's son fought the forest fire and came to Iliene's defense, however misguided. The passive, subservient Sarnlass waits for permission before taking action. I was slapped for not being Sarnlass. Sarnlass will not be much use in a battle, and neither will Prince Legolas if he loses sight of who he really is.

Please don't call me a Mirkwood git, for you seem to know little about braiding techniques. You described me as:
"Longingly, he twisted it into a single braid and stood looking in the mirror."

'Twisted' into a single braid down my back. Not 'plaited' as with a three strand braid. One 'twists' hair into a rope braid (two strands, twist counterclockwise, left over right, repeat) which comes undone immediately. Since I don't have any hair ties -- as a wearer of the collar, I'd need them about as much as an ellon needs a straight razor -- the minute I stopped staring at myself sadly in the mirror and let go of it and lay down to sleep, it was unraveling. By the time Iliene came in, it was gone. That's what would happen the way you described it, anyway.

I do have an eye for fine detail, Miss, and I didn't think you suggested I'd be stupid enough to risk more punishment after what had happened the previous evening. Or maybe you did, but you did not explain it well. The fact that I needed the self comfort was very telling, though. I'm wondering why this is forbidden the courtesans even in the privacy of their own bedrooms. To remind them of their complete lack of status at all times?

Defiance, huh? Maybe that's why I can 'get it up' metaphorically speaking the next morning and go out to fight.

Oh, and when Haldir shows up, am I supposed to follow orders and get away from him, or can I hang onto Orophin until Haldir gets to his side? That's the problem with orders -- you sometimes have to ignore them in certain situations. A prince knows that, but a slave might get a little confused.

To the next young lady, honey, I love AU. Thanks to the professor, it's the only kind of fiction where I can get any sex. But I don't like AU that makes me and the other elves so OC as to be unrecognisable to our own naneths.

Er, I'm all too familiar with the stories where Ada was instrumental in my sexual upbringing. No thank you! About the dark games -- you're assuming facts not in evidence. Authors show, not tell, and Ertia showed him being gentle with Mirie and Ferdal. Anything else, and she should have showed it, not just assumed it or conveniently remembered it 20 chapters in.

Hell yes, my alter ego was into "tie me up and paddle me,' but he and Eferell took turns and it was consensual. I imagine there was some sodomy too. No problem with either of those things in Lorien. It's just when it starts getting rough and nasty that it isn't fun to read about.

Legolas Thranduilion 'rough' with women? My alter ego remembers being selfish and that's all, so let's not start a rumor. Young males can, ah, have little woopsies that make them finish before their partners, and I'm sure Mirie and Ninsewel were well trained enough to act like it was perfectly fine. Blame the system, not the elf. Celeborn seems to be having the same problem, only he's old enough to know better.

If he was rough, then Mandos take him. I'd have no sympathy for anything that happened to him from then on. Show us, Ertia, and we won't care about Sarnlass anymore.

But I'd rather Mandos take the writers of stories that take it so OC that they're using the names, the faces and the locations with no other resemblance to the fandom.

But hey, if my alter ego likes what's happening to him and he's getting off on it, then go to it! I'm getting the picture now.

Pardon me while I go nurse my hangover. Haldir is grousing and insisting he'd never buy flimsy furniture, and Celeborn is still locked in his talan. Only now, he's insisting he's been put off sex for good, and Galadriel doesn't look happy about that.

I wasn't going to show up again, but calling me a git who's rough with women just made me lose it. What movies have you been watching?

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From ANON - Nim on April 11, 2006
First, I know Tolkien has probably reached China with all the spinning he is doing - and not just with Fifteen Years, but with the majority of the LOTR stuff on AFF! So, I really have a problem with the canon fanatics - if you don't like this kind of AU, go elsewhere.

And Thranduil being all sweetness and light to his courtesans, while Celeborn is cruel? Oh, please. I'm certain Thranduil plays lots of dark games - but Ertia chose not to dwell on this, for whatever reason. After all, on Legolas' first day with Celeborn, he has to pick BDSM toys from Celeborn's chest. Ertia pointed out that Legolas had often played this game in the Greenwood. Just how do you think Legolas learned the art of BDSM? Legolas is just as insatiable as his father when it comes to sex. Dear ol' dad was likely instrumental in his sexual upbringing, including BDSM. Perhaps even presented him his own toys when he came of age! And we know Legolas was rough with at least 2 Greenwood courtesans, probably more - does Ertia have to detail everything?

Legolas knew what he was getting into when he signed the contract. Now he has to be the submissive, but he certainly didn't seem to mind his first day with Celeborn. Celeborn's size seemed to be Legolas' biggest problem (pardon the pun), not the BDSM activities. Ertia has allowed Legolas to partake in many non-BDSM sex romps in Lorien, but the naysayers haven't mentioned this. Ertia doesn't usually go into great detail on the het sex, or the pleasant M/M sex, but that's her choice!

Ertia - I love Fifteen Years, and was thrilled you were one of the first to come back to AFF. I'd love to see some long het sex scenes, especially threesomes. Maybe Iliene and Celeborn both making it up to Legolas? After all, they promised!

Sorry to refer to you in the 3rd person so much - I just had to give my 2 cents worth (but 2 cents ain't worth much these days....). I went through severe withdrawal last summer when you had to stop posting. I hope the ache in your heart has eased somewhat over time.
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From Ertia on April 10, 2006
Prince Legolas,

How good of you to drop by!
I was actually wondering how long it would take for your father to tattle on me. I take it I'm in for a spanking?

The alternate scene that I posted to my personal website is one of about a dozen different scenarios that I spent my weekend re-visiting, re-writing, and struggling over. I interviewed Lord Celeborn and you, yourself, about them, in attempts to understand better where I may be losing sight of the story-line. If you are truly interested, I might be convinced to send them to you in exchange for, oh say, a three year reduction to my current contract?

Because, frankly, to quote a certain Goblin King I know, I am exhausted from living up to your expectations of me. If I attempt one more rewrite or second-guess over that scene, I'm likely to fade entirely!

I must note that you didn't seem particularly disturbed by oral sex a few chapters back. Nor by the varieties of sex you've enjoyed since coming to Lothlorien. You may complain however you like about honey and peaches, but if you try to tell me you didn't enjoy being licked clean by Celeborn's skilled mouth, then you are deluding yourself. Overall, I think you are handling yourself admirably for one so new to the Courtesanship. Remember, you are only contracted exclusively to Celeborn for the first five years, which is common ritual for the exchange, and then you will have greater freedom and more autonomy. Things are difficult right now, but rarely does Lothlorien face such trials, and things do improve.

This constant reference to the slap across the face as "smacking the warrior out of you" is tripe and based on preferences that have little place in this story. Are you telling me that a Prince of Mirkwood can't take a little slap across the face for disobeying a direct order? Would you rather a manly slap across the face and sent to your quarters, or turned over Celeborn's knee, spanked like a baby, and given a time-out in the corner? I very specifically enforced Celeborn's having you rise and face him as an equal, rather than keep you on your knees in disgrace. Really, I think you are more than strong enough to handle what you are going through.

Now, something has been irking me. I was going to try to say this politely, but I can't. LOOK, you foolish Mirkwood git, YOUR HAIR IS BRAIDED! You braided it yourself in your room after Celeborn sent you there. You braided your hair in an act of comfort and defiance and fell asleep. Iliene woke you, and you were disturbed by Celeborn with news of the war. You dressed hastily and went for your weapons. Your hair is still braided. Everyone has been to busy to notice, except perhaps Seldayan, and I'm sure he finds it an amusing foible of a young new Courtesan. And believe me, you are going to bless the Valar for those cream-colored linens before the end of the next chapter.

You will learn that in my longer stories, details are everything. If I included it, it's there for a purpose. It's highly unlike you to not pay attention to fine detail, and I confess I find myself disappointed. Perhaps I'll have to see about putting the details in bold print? Or italicizing them?

As for suggesting that you would refuse to fight for Lothlorien, I thought I knew you better than that! Leave an Elven realm to fall to the destruction of Men? If nothing else, what of Rumil? Would you truly abandon the fight knowing one you call friend may be in mortal peril? I do not believe that of you, however fed up you may be with Lord Celeborn's recent lack of consideration.

Thank you for your concern for Orophin. He has had a rough time of it, and I fear greatly for him, as well for the fate of his brother. They need you, Legolas. Please do not abandon them now in their time of need.

Ever Your Lost Love Slave,
Ertia
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From ANON - Legolas Thranduilion on April 10, 2006
Please forgive this addendum, but Ada has just reminded me of my manners.

I would like to extend my best wishes and hopes for a speedy recovery to Master Orophin, who has never done anything to harm me in any way. I rather like his brother Rumil, and I am sure that I will come to like and respect Marchwarden Haldir once we get to know each other and have had the opportunity to settle our differences like adult elves.

I owe him an apology for my hasty misjudgement of Iliene's accident, although we all seem to have been skillfully misled.

Your Obedient Servant,

Legolas (Still Nobody's Catamite) Thranduilion
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From ANON - Legolas Thranduilion on April 10, 2006
Ada was hitting the Dorwinion pretty heavily last night, and I asked him what was eating at him so badly. It took three more flagons before he fessed up and gave me this link.

Sweet Iluvatar's Holy Light! What have I ever done to you that you should enjoy watching me suffer? (I'm relying here on Miss Gabby's statement that: "Don?t think for a minute Ertia or ANY author isn?t fully aware of what she is doing and the psychological implications of her character?s acts.") That is, what have I done besides being inordinately fair of face even for an elf, and having been played on screen by an actor handsome enough to inspire 1001 erotic fantasies? I wouldn't mind, but why do 999 of those erotic fantasies have to involve my rectum?

By my own count, it's no more than three weeks into my fifteen year stay in Lothlorien, and already Celeborn is leaving bruises and having to be reminded to use lube. I fear for the future, I truly do. The only lesson I've learned is that no good deed goes unpunished.

Oh, I see you've been so kind as to write an alternate version of that scene, in which Celeborn most generously allows me to blow him instead of taking me rough:

". Legolas had to draw back quickly, wrapping his hand around the base of the Lord's erection to keep from gagging.
With chagrin, he thought to himself that perhaps it would have been easier to allow himself to be taken as he retrained his focus on his task."

Oh great! Now I get to choke on a big dick. I guess you've taught me not to protest my treatment. The point was, the mighty lord Celeborn couldn't be bothered to take the time to use oil and a few fingers with his little toy. I'll ask you, Mistress Ertia -- would I have been allowed to say 'no, not this afternoon' period? I think that part about me managing a small smile despite my pounding heart indicates I knew 'no' wasn't an option. I probably would have been better off bending over and taking it -- at least I could have been lying down. On the bright side, it seems to have spared me an extra set of bruises on my thighs.

Would you mind writing the scene back in Mirkwood where I treated Mirie or Ninsewel that way -- without Ada having my ears in a jar on his desk for abusing the help? No, it was "Good morning, Mirie, thank you for the 'head,' which was your idea, Mirie, is there anything I can do for you?" Notice how Ada waited for Mirie's signal before taking her on his desk and how he made sure she came before he did. That's what he taught us too, and that's why Ferdal loves him. Too bad the rules are different in Lorien.

I'm sorry I accused your precious Lord Celeborn of almost rape. I don't hold with people who don't say no and then call it rape later. Except in a case like mine and Iliene's where the contract says we have to say yes and smile about it too.

Of course, you've turned me into such a little lapdog that I just loove Lord Celeborn, because he makes me feel sooo special. I especially love how in the new chapter he's sent me out to sneak through the trees in a cream linen tunic with my hair blowing free to get in my eyes and catch in my bowstring. Way to get your favorite concubine killed m'lord!

I have a message for my AU alter-ego in Lorien: Dude, grow a spine! Use your knife to pry off that collar, climb out the window, and haul ass out of there. Don't worry about Celeborn -- elf lords who have to be reminded to use lube on their catamites deserve to have their sex toys taken away. He's got a wife, if he needs sex.. A really fine wife. She's a GILF, if you want the truth.

And if Celeborn expects you to help him fight his war, he's got some nerve. He can't smack the warrior out of you one night and expect you to find that warrior the next morning. You can't turn it on and off like a light switch. You don't owe anything to a realm where you were treated like the lowest of the low. How grateful was he to you for fighting that orchard fire half naked? Not very! He had you chained to a table and eating peaches from that same orchard off you not ten days later. You weren't in on their little game, and they might have skipped it this time around, considering.

Don't worry about that evil wight back in Mirkwood who claims to be your father. He made it plain you're expendable. He's got plenty more heirs where you came from to help him fight off the spiders and the orcs. (That's okay, Ada, I know it really isn't you.)

Steal a horse, ride straight to Mithlond, and get yourself on a boat to Valinor. Of course, that means you won't be around to watch Aragorn's back when the Ring Quest rolls around, but tough sh*t for Middle-earth. Those elves deserve to go down, and the Edain aren't much better. Too bad about the Hobbits, though.

The way Ertia has set it up, running for it makes you an oath-breaker, but don't worry about that either. Manwe Sulimo will release you from that oath. In fact, when he finds out that the elves of the three realms are keeping sex slaves, he's probably going to march in and put that area 100 feet below sea level the way he did with Beleriand. We haven't had that kind of thing since Thangorodrim, and it was Melkor doing it.

See what happens, Mistress Ertia, when you make people suffer for their noble impulses? Every AU has its consequences.

Or else, Bro, you can stay, hunker down, and learn the attitude of cringing servility they seem to want from you. You're doing it for Ferdal, remember? He wouldn't have lasted long, what with Celeborn leaving bruises and taking him rough every time ruling Lorien got a little stressful. I'm not sure what use you're going to be to anyone by the time fifteen years is up, or how you're going to be able to go home and look your father in the eye. But since Miss Ertia broke you, maybe she can fix you.

Take my advice though, and never get within 100 miles of Lothlorien ever again. I can't see you accepting a pretty bow from them with a look of joy on your face. I'd be sticking that bow where Anor doesn't shine -- somewhere involving Celeborn.

Gotta go. I promised I'd get Ada some aspirin, and then I'm having a beer with Haldir. It's been a tough week for him, what with his boss locking himself in his talan and refusing to come out. After Miss Gabby stole his miruvor, all they've been able to hear is him moaning about how he's never going to eat peaches again. But Ada says Cousin Celeborn was always the sensitive type.

Your Uncooperative Servant,

Legolas (Nobody's Catamite) Thranduilion, Prince of Mirkwood

PS To Crowdaughter and justso, thank you for the words of support. Without them, this rant would have been worse. Much worse.

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